Should Have Known - Comments

Hi! (:
First of all, I love the title you have chosen for this story. It describes and fits your story very well, but it doesn't tell too much.
You got me hooked from the first lines, and the first lines were very good. I loved the way you started this story. And what I especially loved was that stalking/ following- thing. It made me smile. (:
I wasn't exactly that familiar with the band, but it didn't matter. This story was great. I didn't know your characters, but I could still read the story and understand what was happening. In some fanfics, you are expected to know many little details about the characters. You just proved that it's not necessary.
Also, this story was very interesting, happy and I enjoyed reading it very much. I couldn't find any spelling mistakes, so credit for that!
The length of this story was good. It wasn't too long but it wasn't too short, either.
The last line was just brilliant, it leaves your readers wondering what could actually happen. And it gives us the chance to use our imagination.
Also, like many people already said, it was great to read a one shot that wasn't about alcohol and sex, like they usually are. This was great just the way it is. I enjoyed this very much.
xx Ninahx

I think there needs to be more. That's was pretty good! I glad it wasn't all about sex, but having a daughter.

This is amazing! It's so different to many other one-shots, just due to the fact you're talking about another family member - one that he didn't realize he had.
It's full of quirky little descriptions that had me smiling at possibly the most inappropriate times - like Moose and his knitting when it was supposed to be serious.
I wish that this had more to it, but I guess that's the point of a one-shot - to leave the reader wanting more, but leaving it to their imagination about what happens next.
There's a few grammatical errors, but nothing too big, and I love the custom layout.

Hi! This is my comment swap. :) Sorry for the late response--I fell asleep at my desk.

The underlying story is definitely a table turner. One thing I love is that it's not all sexual like a lot of band fics/one-shots--it's sentimental. I really wish this were chaptered, though. It would be interesting to see more to his relationship with his daughter. Apart from some grammatical errors, this is a great story.

Heeeeeey.

I'm going to say that I think it needs a bit more proofreading. Nothing major, just letters missing, or a word or two that seems misplaced. I really like that you showed things from the father's point of view. I very rarely see anyone take the man's view into consideration. This was a breath of fresh air compared to the one-shots that I usually see. I'm sad that there wasn't a next chapter button, because I would definitely like to read more.

Hai there

I did enjoy your story, the plot is quite put together and I love how it isn't just another smut bandfic.
I would like to point out, though, that you should pay attention to the punctuation, to make the story flow more easily. Also, you did spell your instead of you're, so make sure you proofread your stuff to avoid these small mistakes.
Overall, I enjoyed your piece

This was so good! People who write kiddie one-shots don't often do them when the man is finding the kid and feeling so weird about it. I don't understand why this doesn't have any comments so far, it's awesome.