Under My Skin - Comments

@ jellyfish-spine
I do understand what you're getting at with this but I must also remind you that everyone's struggle with mental illness is different. For me, this is my portrayal of how my depression surfaced integrated into a fictional story. When I struggle with depression it isn't "when didn't I feel this way?" Because I know I didn't always. For me it is "I used to be happy, why can't I be happy right now?" Or "when did feeling like this become an every day thing for me?"

Disorders aren't always the same because all people aren't the same.

What you're working towards is totally respectable and the in depth look into struggling with depression is important to portray accurately throughout the work. That being said, the struggle, the knitty gritty of it, is less ... self aware for lack of a better description. There is no "when did I start feeling this way" it's more of an "when didn't I feel this way". There's a lot of hopelessness encompassed in living with mental illness that is almost overlooked. What you're working towards is good, just be wary of making anything so poetic that it misses how awful mental illness is. It's like turning cancer into a love story between cells and chemo if you catch my drift.

I hope this made sense....at least what I was trying to comment on.

Hooray! I'm so glad you're still working on this. Keep up the good work. I can't wait to read what happens next :)

Yay! I knew you would continue! Really good writing so far, I love how you are developing the character and the plot is getting really intense.

This is really good so far. He's so tortured. I know there's more to his character than we know about. I hope you finish it!

Please don't stop this, I feel as if it is one of the very few stories that I can really relate to nowadays. You are a fantastic writer, and each chapter never failed to impress me. You wrote like you expertly knew the situation, and don't even get me started on how well you did your details and how you wrote the way the main character was really feeling. I think the layout is actually perfect for this story, I really don't think you need to change anything. I am really looking forward for a new chapter, and I hope you have fun and find this story easy going to write because I will be looking for it on my subscriptions! :D

@ She Is So High.
Thanks for reading it!! ^_^ It's always nice to hear feedback on my stories :). I'm glad you like it

I'm already working on another update. My life is super hectic so it might take a few days. Just bear with me :P

And thanks for the wish of luck on the layout! It's proving a challenge for me lol.

Thank you so much for your comment on my story! I really appreciate it (: I figured since you took the time to read my story, I would read yours. Fantastic decision on my part. Your story is great, I really love how its written, and the overall idea for it. I'll be looking forward to an update, and good luck coming up with a layout!

@ alexander bernadotte
@ abdvction
I went ahead and set it at normal view for you guys. Trying to come up with a layout that will be a little easier to read now :). Hope you enjoy the update!

i'll admit, i was a bit turned off by this story because the red font over the black background was a bit painful to look at. i had to turn on the default layout to read this. i suggest changing it because things like that tend to throw readers off immediately and make them not want to continue reading this. i'm sorry. :(

anyways, this is definitely a great story. i really like how real this is; how it shows that, yeah, you can have everything you could ever want, but still be depressed and feel dead inside. i can definitely relate to that. your writing is very smooth and it reads like water (if that makes sense), which i can really appreciate. you have a knack for describing things perfectly and in a manner that is appealing to the reader. i was definitely left wanting more. well done! (:

@ Vartokk
Indeed you will!

@ abdvction
Thank you so much for the feedback! I was incredibly excited to see someone commented :). I'm glad you like the story! I was definitely thinking about changing the layout because I agree its a little hard to see. I didn't realize until I tried to read it from the story page.

Again, thank you very much for the feedback! Hope to har from you next chapter ^_^

*your. my bad. :(

For starters, you're personifications and overall writing abilities are amazing... I love the way you at this up. I love the plot. In a way, it's telling people that you could have everything and be 'perfect' but still be depressed, and feel dead inside. I had some trouble reading this because of the font color. The red just doesn't really work with the black. Other than that, I liked this. :)