Devil with the Angel's Eyes - Comments

@ butterflywings16
Thanks for your comment. Some of the earlier chapters are a bit rushed but in a way I think this DOES reflect Saria's hectic personality. I'm glad you like it. :)

So I've never read anything like this! I love it even if it is a morbid but that's okay right? xD I didn't find anything wrong grammar or spelling wise. The content was wonderful although some of it seemed a bit rushed. But, hey she's a killer they wanna rush stuff right? I haven't read the Kite Runner and it hasn't made my reading experience any less, so as for the comments on limitability it doesn't seem likely. Thanks for putting this up for comment swap! It's a wonderful story.

Thanks for your comment :) @ Grace x

I've never read the kite runner before so i think that i may have been missing some of the key background information and i didn't really know who the characters were. I'm quite a slow reader so havent managed to read much of this, however, i thought it was really well written and i really enjoyed what i have so far managed to read. keep it up x

@ Dodger
Thanks for commenting. Saria is a sociopath and is very violent. I understand if you don't like her, in fact, if you agreed with her thoughts I'd be worried, haha. She might grow on you as you continue on. She does have some likeable qualities, and can be a very loving person when she wants to be. But if I can make people love and hate Saria, then I've done my job. She's not meant to be clear cut. I'm well aware that I haven't got as much readers as a One Direction fanfiction... I'm not too bothered about that. I write for me and not for readers.. I don't really like those types of fanfics (the 1D ones.. they're kind of..)

Kite Runner is a really great book, well worth having a look at. :)

So I’ve never read The Kite Runner though I keep telling myself to put it on my to read list, so I don’t know any of the characters or even really the background to where you story is set, just a really fair idea.
Right off, I’m not sure whether Saria is supposed to come off as slightly unlikable but for some reason to me she does. I think it might be because of her language and her thoughts when she is only eleven years of age and the fact she is very twisted. I have written characters who are flawed and twisted like this and I know it is a lot of fun to write them and I think you probably do have a lot of fun writing Saria. Maybe she will grow on me.
It is a good story with heaps of potential but like with all fan fictions, your readership will be limited to that of people who have read The Kite Runner and I’m not sure if it will have as much readers as a One Direction fan fiction could have which is a shame.

@ The Dodger
Thanks for your comment. Your words mean a lot to me, thank you. :) I'm glad you like it.

I must admit, the length of this intimidated me at first. Also the fact I've been told to read Kite Runner but have never gotten around to it. Seems to me that after reading this that I should give it a try. I'm really envious of your use of description in this, especially with your characters and settings. I feel like I'm seeing and hearing everything that's going on, which is really big for me. Generally I space out if something doesn't grab my attention but you pulled it off magnificently. :)

@ Nyx Martinez
Thank you so much. Your comments mean a lot to me. :)

Comment Swap:
This was a nice surprise. Usually I'd see stories like this on fanfiction.net but tada! I've never read the Kite Runner but I have seen the movie and if you can write an FF to that, congrats!
I thought this story was very well written, you had plenty of meaty paragraphs that don't scare you with their length. This story should seriously have more comments!