Is This What You Meant by Forever? - Comments

I LOVE the dialogue, though some of it's consistent, it fits! Both of the character's story together is very interesting and attention pulling. The twists in there were also exciting, and I had the urge to read it again.

Oh god, my computer just spazzed. My mistake.

Right off the bat, the first thing I notice is that you don't have block paragraphing. Adding that double space between each paragraph makes it so much easier to read and it's one of mibba's rules. That being said, I think this is very well written. I noticed that you vary your sentence structure very nicely and it isn't bland, repetitive or choppy! That ending was not what I expected at all! I really didn't think he was going to get stabbed! And then there's another hunt, but with the little girl. It was just so creepy and it gave me the chills! I totally think that's how predators work and that's what creeps me out the most about this. Excellent job!

Comment Swap:
Well, this is interesting. I just commented on your other story, you told me there was a prequel and here I am on comment swap, getting it.

But this story was so interesting. Twitch is so twisted and haunting. It's actually scary to read if you think about how this actually happens to some people. Now that I've read this, I'm going to go back because I find it really interesting. What I thought was going on in the sequel was going on, and now it makes more sense. Good job. I really like this.

Comment Swap:
Well, this is interesting. I just commented on your other story, you told me there was a prequel and here I am on comment swap, getting it.

But this story was so interesting. Twitch is so twisted and haunting. It's actually scary to read if you think about how this actually happens to some people. Now that I've read this, I'm going to go back because I find it really interesting. What I thought was going on in the sequel was going on, and now it makes more sense. Good job. I really like this.

Off the bat, the first thing I notice is that you don't have block paragraphing. Adding that double space between each paragraph makes it so much easier to read and it's one of mibba's rules. That being said, I think this is very well written. I noticed that you vary your sentence structure very nicely and it isn't bland, repetitive or choppy! That ending was not what I expected at all! I really didn't think he was going to get stabbed! And then there's another hunt, but with the little girl. It was just so creepy!

Comment Swap:
Well, this is interesting. I just commented on your other story, you told me there was a prequel and here I am on comment swap, getting it.

But this story was so interesting. Twitch is so twisted and haunting. It's actually scary to read if you think about how this actually happens to some people. Now that I've read this, I'm going to go back because I find it really interesting. What I thought was going on in the sequel was going on, and now it makes more sense. Good job. I really like this.

@ xPoison_n_Blood
I'm working on 'There Goes My Drama Queen', I'm really feeling this character. Hehehhehehehe. I'm so excited to read your next post!! soxoooxxooxxooxx

@ GemVicious
It's coming! I'm working right now! It's just that I need a solid start and then I should be good from then on. xoxoxoxox

I need the next part!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! now!!!!!!! hehehehe oxoxoxoxoxoxox

@ GemVicious
Oh, yes ahaa. It was a pretty intense little snippet, I figured I'd leave it at that xoxoxoxoxox

@ xPoison_n_Blood
Wait, that was a oneshot?? I was thinking there would be a next chapter when the girl sees him hahahaha xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoox

@ GemVicious
Ahhaaa Look out for the sequel, I'll be putting it up within the hour, hopefully. I could hardly leave a character like that to a oneshot! xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxox

This is the best thing I've ever read. I already love Twitch <33333333333333333333

holy shit this is fanstastic.
oh my god. seriously
you're brilliant.
i can't get over this.
i'm sitting here in shock right now.
i think i'm probably going to read this over again
or maybe three more times
or more
it doesn't exactly surprise me that you're this good, though.
i always knew you were a great writer.
write more things.