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  • hockeylove719

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    Ok, so I definitely liked the Cinderella reference; it was cute and gave made Biznasty seem sweet...that's not a normal word used to describe him hahaha. There were some grammatical errors/missing words but obviously it did not deter me from reading lol.
    I liked the club they worked at and their fake names too. The one thing I was upset about was that you didn't go in depth about their little "game" they played with the boys first night they met, I feel like that would have been hilarious...but I also understand because it might have made the story way longer than you wanted (seeing as how I have that issue by elaborating way too much, I can respect that you know when to cut it off lol)
    Anyways, I plan to put up the winners within the next couple hours so you can check that out on the contest page! :)
    July 8th, 2013 at 01:11am
  • Jayess

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    Wait, that last one is Italian? Mebbe?
    June 2nd, 2013 at 04:51pm
  • Jayess

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    Wait, that last one is Italian? Mebbe?
    June 2nd, 2013 at 04:51pm
  • Jayess

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    Encore! Brava! I have exhausted my 'French'!
    June 2nd, 2013 at 04:50pm
  • teaspoons.of.sober

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    Great story I agree with @H_DIZZLE a spin off would be great :-)
    June 2nd, 2013 at 09:22am
  • pogo5176

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    Loved this!! kinda want a spin off to see what happens, but thats just me
    June 2nd, 2013 at 05:37am
  • A1407719

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    cute story!! can't wait for the next chapter
    May 29th, 2013 at 08:45am
  • rehbein

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    Love this! Super light and fun.
    May 29th, 2013 at 04:29am
  • teaspoons.of.sober

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    Great update, I can't wait to see val's reaction when she sees Paul again :-) :-)
    May 29th, 2013 at 04:09am
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    Great update, I can't wait to see val's reaction when she sees Paul again :-) :-) gr
    May 29th, 2013 at 04:08am
  • teaspoons.of.sober

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    I like this, update soon :-)
    May 28th, 2013 at 12:22pm
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