July 7th, 2013 at 04:40pm
The Struggle of the Underdogs - Comments
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Ooooohmyyyyy . . . . are you a professional writer? i mean you are using words, describing words in the right places and writes like a professional, Just that, i think the events are happening too fast for me, but surely i'll read the whole thing! great work!July 7th, 2013 at 07:53am
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@ nightwish435
Welcome! And me too.June 4th, 2013 at 11:37pm -
@ ToxicStar
Thank you so much for the honest feedback! I'll give you a hint about Carl and Riona: both of them will be huge leaders in bringing change to Noodle High
I hope you continue to enjoy the story as it develops further! 
June 4th, 2013 at 08:14pm -
I like it. I like how you told jeff's point of veiw, cause I didnt think he would be so emotional about getting Riona to like him. Riona to me seems like she is going to be inspiring lots of people there. She truly speaks her mind. I did think that the part of carls parents dying was a little confusing. like they got hit by a drunk driver, but i dont really understand how carl had enough time to get away but his parents didnt. but anyway at first I thought the drunk driver was going to be Jeff's dad or something. that was my first thought. I think its cute how carl and maggie have this special-bonding- relationship with each other, and Im curiuos as to what special connection that Carl and Riona will now share. and just the name 'noodle' really puts some corny apects to it and I like that. Also cant wait to meet the other characters yet to come. Good work, Keep it up!June 4th, 2013 at 07:53am
Haha well my goal is to become a professional writer