The Wicked Witch is Dead - Comments

Thanks for commenting on my blog with this story! I like it! It's got a good plot with good characters! The summary really gives readers a good idea of what they're getting while really peaking the interest!

I'm gonna rec this and hope to read more of this, and other stuff you've written,in the future! :)

Hola! I am here from the comment swap blog you posted. ^_^

I like the idea of this and you have a pretty good start but let me give a few tips!

You have a few minor grammar mistakes here and there, but nothing too extreme. An example is, "Yes it's me! My sister and I have been staying hear for a week. I guess your aunt didn't tell you," I replied. That contains the wrong "hear". It should be "here". Also, if a dialogue comes up like I smiled, "bye", The "b" in bye should still be capitalized. And for that sentence's case, you would put a period instead of a comma. This is pretty much it.

Now, as for story content, like I said: it's a good start. I have one suggestion. Don't tell us about the character; show us. I'll use her favorite color scene as an example. The character stated, "As you may notice, blue is my favorite color." Try taking it out and let the author infer that. I was able to guess this without the character stating it.

Enough of that now! Let's talk about the plot! This is actually an intriguing plot. The way you wrote the summary caught my attention fairly quickly. My favorite line in chapter 1 was, "Chistian... He sure didn't act like one."

I'll be subscribing! I'm excited to see what happens next.

Great job and keep writing