Without You I'm Nothing - Comments

awh i love this story

ok. I'll make sure I space them out more.

I guess the actual layout is okay, but the text paragraphs are just too long and mushed together. It would be so much easier to read if you spaced them out a bit.

lol do you think the house i picked out is to big or do you think it will suit the family well?

Aew! A baby! Wut wut!

I'll have to look at it later because i'm on my phone. I really don't even remember what the layout is, so if you could tell me what it looked like that could help so i can figure out how to fix it now.

Just a little recommendation is to fix the layout of the text if you can. Between how the text is set up and the background it makes the story very difficult to read. It would be awesome if you could take the big long paragraphs and space them out a bit so that the text is easier to read.

She couldn't call the police because she wasn't near a phone, and she couldn't run away because Sean had to strong of a grip around her arm the whole entire time, and she was also to scared to call out for help.

I don't understand why she couldn't just run away or call the police :/

That's a good idea, i'll take it into consideration, BUT i think i might not need it after i add this chapter.

Well not necessarily ask herbut yeah she could be like I'm not ready for another relationship. ANd than it' like that awkward moment between the two. Then you could have them start kissing and stuff and Sean walks in sees the 2 of them gets pissed at her. And she's all like yo have no right to be mad at me after you did something alond those lines idk lol

@ Wolfy1991
What do you mean? Like norman asks her to go out with him, and she tells him she's not ready? Then they start going at what again?

@ Miakoda
Yayy I can't wait. I'm so hocked! :)
Okay i gotta an idea well not really an idea but i was just foreshadowing that things would be a little award with her and Norman. Like that I'm not ready yet conversation and than start going at it again and Sean would catch them or something. That's what i was predicting anyways lol.

@ Wolfy1991
I'm glad you like it, i'll update sometime tomorrow, i havent finished the next chapter yet, and i'm trying to think of ways to spice it up, so if you have any plot ideas please share

AT first I wasn't sure but I'm in love with this story now! Please update soon! :)

@ Maddy120296
Thanks, I'm glad you liked it. I try to update every day, so that I don't forget about my stories..

@ AkaraSoma
I'm glad you liked it, and I guess you were right, I just never thought I was good at writing it, because the first story i wrote in, I lost a subscriber to it.

I told you that you'd do fine <3
I love it :3

Thank god for usher :D that sex scene was hot!! Update soon!

oh...I've never written much with stories using planes so I'll go and fix that right now :) thank you for pointing that out to me.