Can You See Me? - Comments

It's brilliant, the sister Oli thing or well the start of it at the moment. :D Good job

@ TravelerSoul
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoy and I will keep writing! Thanks for the comment!

I really enjoy reading this fic. It's cute how James acts and how well the whole band took the bird into their lives. Aaaannnddd the drama was placed perfectly, good timing and all, you know.

Keep writing love.

@ LonelyInASeaOfStars
Haha I know I was waiting for it too!!! Glad you like it! More to come in the future!

Romance YESS!!

@ I'mDifferent
Thank you, I'm glad you like it! I won't be updating till tomorrow thought, well that's what it's looking like anyways I may change my mind but today has just been a long day and I wanna make the next chapter really good so I'm gonna take this day to kind of think about it. But keep reading and I hope you continue to enjoy it!

This is great! Please update again very very soon.

@ LonelyInASeaOfStars
Ok thanks so much! I was kinda stumped on that but now I got some pretty good ideas! Thank you!

I think friendship would be really good for this one considering she's 16 almost 17. Friendship would make the relationship more meaningful and after she turns 17 I think it would be good to turn up the romance!

@ LonelyInASeaOfStars
I'm glad you like how it's going! I'm already trying to figure out a really good next chapter! I just don't know if the story is ready for more romance or more friendship first you know? But I just really want it to be good so you should get back to me tell me if you think more romance or friendship first and then I'll fix up a nice chapter! Thanks for reading too! :)

@ I'mDifferent
Haha thank you very much! I'm just glad you like it and I try my best to update every night so trust me you probably won't have to wait too long! Just look out for the next update! :)

You were right I do like how things are turning out!! :3 James is just a hunk of adorableness in this story!! I love it!!

This is really good. I like it. Please update again very very very very very very very soon.

@ LonelyInASeaOfStars
Thank You! I was a little worried I was using "Fourth Grade Words" If you know what i mean haha but i am going to be continuing and I'm actually uploading here in a few minutes and I'm gonna start on the fourth chapter and it should be up early tomorrow or later tomorrow! But I'm really glad you like it! Thanks again and make sure you keep reading!
SECRET TIP: I think you're gonna like the way things are turning cuz I do!!

@ LonelyInASeaOfStars
Thank You! I was a little worried I was using "Fourth Grade Words" If you know what i mean haha but i am going to be continuing and I'm actually uploading here in a few minutes and I'm gonna start on the fourth chapter and it should be up early tomorrow or later tomorrow! But I'm really glad you like it! Thanks again and make sure you keep reading!
SECRET TIP: I think you're gonna like the way things are turning cuz I do!!

@ LonelyInASeaOfStars
I didnt mean to type the same thing twice my computer froze so I tried pushing the submit button twice so thats why its up there twice lol :P

I think the style you're using right now is great :D I love this story so far and I hope you continue it. I'm curious to see how everything will turn out :3

@ the_stupid_lamb
Haha thank you so much and I'll definitely take that into consideration! Thanks so much for the advice! I appreciate it :)

mmm not bad, not bad, :) the error that mostly bothers me, is when your charaters are talking, it looks like "are you ready?" "hell yeah" when it should look like;
"Are you ready?"
"Hell yeah!"
that's the only thing i caught that bothered me, mind you, i'm typing on my phone, so I can't say much about grammer errors or anything.