The Last Wolf - Comments

I'm finally back after a long break and checking my subscription list. Do you think you'll keep up with this, dear? I hope you do because its a great gem.

This story is really brilliant! The only possible error I could ever think of was spelling, but that's usual with any story really. I like the theme and content of the story very much and it flows effortlessly well! Dahlia is such a unique and wonderful character and you portray her life really well, almost as if it were your own :) amazing, keep up the great work!xxx

Really like the story! Keep it up

Yes! Finally an update :)
And we get to see another one this week?!?! Merry Christmas to us the readers then?

I'm hoping to find out more in the next update, this was well written and great cliff hanger once again!

Ah! I wanna know more!

This was a really good chapter :)
It was a little creepy at times but I was pulled into the characters once again!
I really can't wait to see what happens next!:)

<3

Oh my gosh! Have I mention how much I love Colt?
The way you describe him is just yummy! He's really attractive an his personality is really amusing and entertaining. You also have him written as a kind hearted person with a sad past that most people can relate to and Dahlia. He's this heroic character that you want to be friends with and want to be close.

Ou the pack! I'm kind of excited to meet these people and wondering how the pack work since wolves and shifters are different.

I really love this story, and I know I tell you this a lot but its true.

Good story :) can't wait to read more :)

I'm so sorry for my lack of commenting in here, I usually just tell you after reading but this chapter was by no means boring because it was great for a filler.

feel bad for the Mom, she doesn't care that the girl she raised despite not being her own child is a werewolf. She's facing the problem head on even if she shows some fear(as anyone would) and I feel like the slap was deserved.

Dahlia shouldn't be rude and that hateful towards her adopted mom, honestly I feel like it should be the Dad because he's creepy and I have a bad feeling about him. She shouldn't have growled either, but the inner wolf can not always be controlled right?

Anyways this chapter is good, you made a spelling mistake when the mom was stuttering but other than that I as always enjoyed reading :)

Layout:
I like the deep red and the black, these colors fit perfectly together. The shadowy text fits as well. What I would change is the color of the numbers the chapters have, from purple to white. It fits better. As for the backround, it has to be changed. A dark vintage background (black with bits of white) would make your layout perfect.

Summary:
The author's note from the summary should be taken off. As for the actual summary, you have to re-write it. You have to make it interesting and mysterious to fit the type of story this is. The first mistake there is, how can she not be sure if werewolves are a myth when she is one? Mentioning Twilight, is a completely turn off. The last sentence though was a good one.

Chapter One:
The second picture with the dripping blood should be taken off. It's against the rules and you will get reported for it.

The first paragraph stated facts and that captured my interest. It was a nice way to start this.

Second paragraph, that part I am healthy. It is summer, and I am prepared to have fun. I hope I will have fun…doesn't flow nicely. Re-word it maybe or take it off.

Third paragraph, I wasn’t allowed outside because I was prone to catching every cold, it should be changed to wasn’t allowed outside because I was prone to catch every cold if I'm right.
At the end it would flow better if you wrote it as, “You have to eat more so you will grow up to be strong like your mother.” He used to say, even though I knew I would never be like my mother.

The rest of it was interesting and I didn't notice anything else that should be changed.

The last paragraph with the flower names and the explanations was a nice way to end the chapter. So brownie points for that.

I'd suggest that you cut the first chapter to two chapters. The divider is nice looking but the first part and the second are completely different. Nothing connects the two parts, so you could also add more to the second part.

These are all the corrections and suggestions I had to make while reading this.

Overall, I have to say that this story has great potential and even though I can only give you five out of ten writing pens for this piece, I have subscribed to this story cause the main theme is to my liking and because from reading your descriptions at parts, I know that if you go back and edit it, you'll turn this story to a masterpiece. I believe in your writing skills.

Your new fan,
~Marian.

Holy crap :-) once more I fall more in love with this story
I love how clearly she's not their real child
Ohhh man things just keep getting more interesting :-)
Can't wait to see the next chapter :-)

Oh man this was amazing!
I'm excited to see what happens next, always on the edge!! :-)

amazing! Please update!

Nikki my dear you always seem to amaze me when it comes to story writing. Once again you have given readers a mind blowing plot and a new take on werewolves/shape shifters with this story. It is well written and detailed, I love the description of the characters and how you make the characters just like typical teenagers. I like who she looks nothing like her parents, and that her dad is a priest/preacher and how religion will be brought into this story.

I'm really excite to see the next chapter :-)

I love your story so far. :)