Putting The Dog To Sleep - Comments

Firstly, the layout - it is simple, minimalistic and quite chic. I like it. Usually I wouldn't, but it suits the story, the atmosphere of your writing, I feel. It’s empty, so to me, your writings really resolute in my mind when I read it, which gives it even more of an effect. (I hope you get what I’m trying to say?) Your words are quick and precise, but at the same time quite descriptive. I see you painting the picture and I can follow through the story.

I don’t know if it’s me or what, but I love stories like this: obscure writing, left open to the reader’s imagination.

Okay, a couple chapters onwards… I decided I love this. So simple, yet beautiful.
You say he is ugly, but the way you narrate Morrissey, in my mind I can’t help but fall a little for him. Again, I think it’s because that’s the way you describe him. Painfully alluring.

The only thing I could pick up was in ch.11; I think you mean the word ‘stayed’ instead of staid?

Anyway, keep it up. :)

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Firstly, I'm not a fan of the layout. Frankly, it boring and upon seeing it, I didn't want to read the story. I did though, so don't worry. The way you set your characters up was different from what I normally read, which is a good thing. Your descriptions are good and the chapters are a nice small size. Great work!

hello, i only read the first few chapters and i must say that i am so fucking glad i wasn't forced to read another grand example of what makes me pull my hair out and cry on this writing website. the idea behind this is spectacular and i'm not just bull shitting ps. i cannot truly find anything wrong with this, i tired. i love how the chapters are in bite sized pieces so i don't feel overloaded and you have thus found yourself a recommender, huzza to you madame!

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I just want to say you are incredible, the way you write is really something different. I loved the way you set up the chapters, short but they definitely pack a punch. I still don't really understand who your characters are or what the story is but that's ok, because I enjoyed every second of reading this and I really wish there was more. I love that you don't tell us much and that it's all left to our imagination and that the characters could really be anything we want them to be. We are making this story our own in our mind, I feel as if I'm in your head helping you think about your story, if that makes any sense. This was really something different that I've never read before or even seen. I really hope to read more of your writing this was truly art.

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First of all, love the layout - simple but in place.
I like how you use words, I fell in love with this phrase " his breath ghosts across floorboards" in Chapter 5. Also, I think it's a great choice to make Morrissey ugly and not "the most handsome guy in the entire world", because that would be too ordinary/
In the end, I must confess that I have no fucking idea what the fuck did I just read, but that's not a bad thing as long as this story has its' charm and keeps my attention, so I would say - good job, keep it up!

I adore this so much. You do second person so beautifully! This story is breathtaking and I really cannot wait for more.

I do hope my featuring this in my blog will attract you more readers / commenters! I genuinely enjoy reading this story so much. This was extremely haunting and beautiful. I am most excited to learn more and more and more about these people. Morrissey especially. I'm starting to wonder if he's even real at all, or if he's simply a ghost of a person or a figment of the imagination. Breathtaking. I don't mind what you do with it as long as you promise you'll continue it. That's all I want. ❤

ps. I very much like how quickly you update.

Oh my gosh, I adore this. Seriously, I don't even know what to say, but I'm not even sure what to say. This is so beautiful. Your second person point of view is stunning and this is absolutely beautiful!

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I like this a lot:) Most second person stories I've read weren't like this, so you're certainly unique. I'd like to see where this story is going. It's pretty interesting and I like all of the detail that you've incorporated into this boy. And the whole story being in 2nd person just makes it all the more interesting :) Keep writing!

My goodness, this is lovely! I've never really read a story in second person point of view because everyone always seems so against it, but honestly? It's perfect for this story. I wouldn't want to read it any other way. I think I love this so much because Morrissey isn't described as being beautiful or like this Greek god like most people portray their characters. He's average, if not a bit ugly. I think that's the best part - the "you" is in love with him despite all of his unsightly-ness. And I actually do find myself falling in love with his character because he's so perfectly imperfect. I love your descriptions, describing the "fence of his mouth" and the demons or monsters behind it. I'm also curious as to what's going on and what will develop from this. Personally, I love how short the chapters are too. I don't think that any other length would work. I do plan on featuring this in my next blog for underrated stories. Update soon and have a lovely day! ❤

I am really digging this. Normally, I'm not a big fan of second-person writing, but this is so lovely. The descriptions are wonderful, but yet at the same time it's so simple. The short chapters work very well for this type of story.
I'm looking forward to reading more!