Change My Mind - Comments

Hmm. Well, this is a lovely idea. But, it's a smidge all over the place. I enjoyed Callie & Annies chapters the best, but it will be neat to see where the story takes you. The layout, my dears... No, please, just, no :\ It's very distracting from the story, and doesn't exactly add to it, either. As one of the other commentes said, work on creating your characters; that in itself will take you a long way. Keep up the good writing, ladies.

*commentswap

*comment swap*
as every chapter is written by another person, i'm gonna comment on them separately:

chapter 1 - first negative reactions are always fun, but I think it was too much and didn't really look real. i think it could have been better if Ashley and Harry didn't actually make out in the closet, you could just write how they spent those seven minutes standing there, but Ashley was dying to kiss him. it would build more tension between them.
chapter 2 - it was nice of Niall to not take and advantage of Alana, i liked how they just simply danced and had a good time.
chapter 3 - the writting is a bit messy and few mistakes caught my attention. but not bad, i liked that swings thing.
chapter 4 - liked that Callie and Zyan already have a history. however, in the last parapgraph you wrote "Marissa", not "Callie" ;)
chapter 5 - this one is the best one so far. Annie's storyline is the most unique one among all!

since you guys have so much main characters in the story, it's good that it's co-written, however, you should work more on creating those characters, because so far Alana, Chloe and Callie are the same.
talking about the layout, i find it really bad, it looks like a huge mess ;/

good luck!

Okay, I love the concept for this, how it's that "one night will change it all". That makes me excited to see what will happen with all of them on that night!
With Ashley, I love how sassy she was with Harry. She didn't let him talk no game
With Alana, I love how she was more bubbly and carefree when she was talking to Niall. It was sweet!
With Chloe, I like how she's the more innocent one and I absolutely agree with her about alcohol being gross!
With Callie, I like how her and Zayn seem to have this previous friendship that has gone south. I think that's going to make things very interesting for her side of the story.
With Annie, I love how she stood up for herself with Peter, and then louis swooped in to save the say and I'm in love!

so I just read chapter two (for that comment swap), and I really liked it. guess it's kinda fate that always forever; is writing my favorite of all the boys! i really like that niall is still being so respectful and romantic to alana even when she's drunk. he coulda been grinding on her on the dancefloor but he asked, held out his hand. awww cute i can't help but wonder how lany would have reacted if she did remember who niall was

Good update!! (:
Loved it!!
Please update soon! <3

Nice update!! <3
Loved it!

Aww. That was a cute chapter!
Update soon! Can't wait for more <3

aww.
Chloe is so shy and cute! Liam was so nice to her.

OMG. ALANA MET NIALL. rie uenhgjtrfnhu bhgibnutn8ub
And she mentioned about his accent.

IDK. BUT THEY ARE ALREADY ADORABLE

Another great chapter! I'm excited to see where y'all take this! Really looking forward to reading more, update soon please♥♥

I like the concept of keeping the boys famous and having it a rich party makes it even more realistic for the boys to be there. Most of the time in stories, the boys just show up in random, out of place settings.

I didn't really spot a lot of errors but this sentence made me confused: The door creeked open a red-head with bright brown eyes grinned. I'm not sure if that was supposed to be two sentences or if you were going to conjoin it with an 'and'. Also, creaked is spelled with an 'a'. I'm sorry to be nitpicky, but errors disrupt the flow of the story for me and it makes it not as enjoyable as it could be.

I also like the fact that Ash isn't an obsessed fangirl but I don't understand why she hates him so much. It seems like that part was sort of rushed and full of loose ends, if that makes any sense. I just...I don't know. The snappy hatred towards him just confused me since there wasn't much reason behind it, but maybe it's just that way because it's the first chapter.

Anyway, this story was a nice read. I liked it.

I love this already. I can't wait for more <3
Great start, I'm excited to read more! (:
Keep up the great work! :D update soon!

ermuahgwad.
GROUP WRITE. YAY.

I actually like this, I have a feeling it's not going to be one of your cliché fan fiction x