Hidden Sister - Comments

@ memyselfndI
Thank you for liking my story. Yeah I know my punctuation and spelling are horrible to be honest this story is a good 7 years old back before I was able to write properly. As it goes on it does get better, I just haven't taken the time to re write everything. Thank for your the critique, I do appreciate it. :) hope you enjoy the rest of the story.

Haven't read very far, but I do have 2 things to say..
One, punctuation goes a LONG way when it comes to... Anything really.
Two, instead of writing (sp?) after a word, trying searching it in Google. If it's wrong, it'll correct you... Though I have to say, I used to do that sp? thing too :/
But I am loving the story :) Well done

@ dancer101
as you read along the story it does change into first person POV, I just haven't taken the time to re write the rest of the story that way.

I rea the frst chapter and it is really interesting, but I really think you should consider changing it to a first person p.o.v. cause I don't like reading stories ta are like you did his. Just a suggestion

It really sounds like an interesting concept but I hate readingstorys written like you did this it is really annoying and I cant focuss on what happened, if you changed it to I did this or she did this I am really sure you would get a lot more commentsreaders and so on, I am going to try and read this because it looks so good.