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  • fascination.

    fascination. (100)

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    This plot line is so unique and refreshing and I just love it. I'm so used to the stereotypical boy meets depressed girl, fixes all of her problems, and they get married. Here you have this complex, amazing idea filled with endless potential.

    I'm usually against having long first chapters but this is my only exception. Since you have such an interesting plot I feel as if the long first chapter is necessary to get all of the drama set up. All I want to know is why exactly "Hazel" and "Spencer" have to continuously change identities. Is it something their parents started? Are they immortal? Are they trying to hide a dark secret? Endless questions are spitting through my mind and I want answers... now!

    I also love how the story isn't carried by dialogue but instead of the narrator's thoughts. The only thing I would suggest adding is a bit more details about body language and the setting instead of just saying where they are and one quality about the place.

    Overall, I think this story is kickass and the layout matches it very well.
    August 5th, 2013 at 06:07am
  • Yummy Octopie

    Yummy Octopie (100)

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    I enjoy this so far... can't wait for this to progress :D

    b x
    July 23rd, 2013 at 08:06am
  • TheWh0rr0r

    TheWh0rr0r (100)

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    I love it so far! :D
    July 23rd, 2013 at 07:27am