Promises - Comments

I love this! It's so sad, but so good! Well done so far c:

I am tearing up. I think I will go sit in a corner and cry because this is just so sad. I still love it though

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Firstly the title is short and snappy, it makes you want to know more which is always good. Secondly the lack of a layout is disappointing. It makes the story more interesting to read if you put in the time to make one. Your plot is good, I haven't read stuff like this before. I have one problem though, sometimes you didn't separate the speech when it was a new person talking, that made it look very untidy and it was off putting since you did that in the very first paragraph. But overall, good job.