My Sadist King - Comments

Ugh, the abductor gives me the creeps. So far he seems totally twisted. You described him in the short description as sick in the head and I defiantly think you portray that.

“I couldn’t tell her that the dark clothes reflected how I felt on the inside. I just hated people. I hated everything.

It was blatant that I was out of place throughout my short high school career, but I didn’t care what anyone thought of me. I just wanted to be myself and be happy about it.”

This part, along with your description of Kelly as the black sheep is very relatable to a lot of people and I like that. I’ve never read a story where the abductee wants to be kidnapped. I’m curious as to whether she’ll regret letting herself get taken and what will happen to her. It's great so far

Just. Oh my god. I love stories like this, and this one is fantastic so far. I like your character Kelly (I can relate with being a black sheep) and I love the character of the creepy/charming kidnapper The way you write flows very well - the chapter length keeps me wanting more and the details aren't too overbearing. The layout is awesome too.

Overall: I need another dose.

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I really wanted there to be more. I've read stories about Stockholm Syndrome but ever when the victim wanted to go.that is definitely new and quite refreshing. Not only is this unique but it's written with a sort of tone that I just loved. The way you detail the scenes, the characters and Kelly's thoughts really made everything tie in together. Especially at the end of each chapter how you add a simple, yet powerful sentence.

I got to say, this is good. Exactly my cup of tea. It's written very well and the whole idea is different. I cannot complain about one thing, honestly. I subscribed too because this is so perfect for me.

Great job on just everything.

I saw a post in the forums in which you said you weren't feeling too confident about your writing. And to be honest, I don't think you should be feeling that way because your writing is really refreshing to read.

You have a unique style and I love how well you can write in the first person point of view. Some writers can't really pull it off as well as you can, and it was nice to see that. I also think it was nice to read a story where the author made me feel emotional for the character.

The description was simple and carefully chosen, and what I liked about this was it was to the point but well written at the same time. Well done. Keep writing!

Holy fucking WHAT? WHAT? WHAT? WHAT?
Oh my GOD!
NICOLE START THIS, LIKE IF I HAD A REMOTE I'D BE RAPING THE PLAY BUTTON. GOGOGOGO, I MUST LEARN ABOUT THESE CRAZY ASS CHARACTERS AND omg I can just imagine the gore.

Okay, so I'm totally weird but I'm craving that is really not the word for this gore and horror and GOD KNOWS you're the best at this. The anticipation will kill me gurl, omg. It might become one of my favorite stories you've written. EVEN MORE THAN FATHER AND DAUGHTER AND THE TWINS. But I'm so excited now!

Gogogo, Floppy Penguin!