July 25th, 2014 at 03:11am
Dear lord that was beautiful and heartbreaking. In the beginning when you were using past tense I thought "oh they probably just broke up is all" BUT THEN YOU MENTIONED A HOSPITAL BED AND I WAS JUST LIKE NOPE.
I really loved reading it but it hurt my heart a lot omg. The one line I really liked a lot was "I hated the taste of coffee, but I loved the taste of her." I don't know why but it just made me smile and I don't know, I just really liked it! The whole thing though was just amazing, like how the narrator just spoke so highly and loving of her, ugh it was just great.
Wow this was very beautiful, romantic and yet very sad. It shows how much the speaker cares for her even until the end. I was able to feel the speaker's emotions and feelings throughout your detailed descriptions which was heartbreaking to read. This is a great piece and your writing is really good. The statement where you write and mention that they were in a hospital bed and months ago she was diagnosed, my heart almost stopped. I couldn't believe it and that's when the story hit me more ways than before.
The title and the layout fits perfectly with the theme and mood of it and I think you did an amazing job here.