Purity - Comments

I really love her character. The way she thought beyond herself and decided to use her one wish to save him, omg. I also love the way she stayed true to her name, like she was pure from the very beginning until the end and I think you really captured her spirit in such a small amount of words. A+, love this.

I love the title - simple, elegant, and can carry so much meaning.
The summary line is also great. It has spiked my curiosity.

I thoroughly enjoyed this story. It's so powerful, particularly at the beginning.

The girl's character is refreshing. She's unafraid of death, and selfless, and the way she's accepted the inevitable is really admirable, and obviously reflects the mind-set of a lot of terminally ill patients. All through her deterioration, she remains strong in her personality and it was so nice to see her spend her last day doing something true to herself.

Your character development in this is perfect, and the addition of the fallen angel was curious and pleasant. I couldn't predict any part of this, and it was just overall a really beautiful story.

Good luck in the contest.

I'm so very late with these, but here's part of your Mibbaween treat!

This was so heartbreaing, really. You've filled it full of emotion and it was a little sad at the end. I don't cry (much) but I did feel myself getting a little teary. The twist you added in was really clever! I think it says a lot about Purity's character that she was able to so selflessly give away that wish like that. I'm a big sucker for characters that have names that tie into the plot (I could spend hours looking up names with clever meanings) so I really liked that you had her name being as important as it was. What Purity did was a totally selfless and wonderful thing and I think it's a lovely thing to base a drabble off of. This was so cute, heartbreaking and wonderful all at the one time. I don't now how you managed all of those emotions in the space of such a small word count, but well done!

I agree with what most people said, this was beautiful. You're very talented and I enjoyed reading this. Loved the layout by the way.

this was beautiful. At the beginning, I thought that she was going to wish for the angel for health. But then you surprised me in the end. Your writing style had got me hooked from the start, and i couldn't believe it. Few other writers on this site have done that to me. The way your words flow, and your character development of the dying girl is just wow. Your extremely talented, keep it up.

This is beautiful, engaging, emotional, the list goes on. The best Drabble I have read on this website, absolutely amazing. The whole thing flowed really well and is perfection. You're writing style is just WOW, you're so talented. Xxx

Coming here from my candy bowl!! This was actually really, really well done. I absolutely love how you tied her name into the plot line. This was actually really good at capturing emotion. Kudos to you!!

This is a very emotional story. I noticed something about the dialogue right off the bat, though most of it may seem realistic, some doesn't. "I wish that she'd die already." could be changed to "I wish she'd die already." because having the word that in there doesn't make me feel as if the dialogue is realistic.

But yes, this is quite well done. I love the way you describe everything.

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You have stabbed me with this one. Oh jeez, at first I was all nervous and was like, "OMGZ HEZ DEVIL." Then I was feeling bad for him more and more throughout Purity's POV. I think this is really beautiful, written well with no errors. And the way you word things, so simple but perfect and descriptive. I love this.

You're really good at these sorts of stories. D; You just like stabbing at my heart with little knives because this piece was so beautiful. Purity's character was true to the very end and it was a very fitting end to a tragic, but uplifting story. I love that most of the time, she isn't even focused on herself, but on him. It just shows how much she was thinking about him instead of her fate.

Definitely going to rec this. :]

Oh wow. That last line killed me. "Maybe I should have saved my soul like most would have done but I guess I was named Purity for a reason." That's beautiful. I really liked this story. It made me curious to know why she was in a wheelchair and why she was dying. I could feel her pain through the story, being told to die already and that all she did was sit in a wheelchair.

I liked the angel in the story too. It was an interesting ... relationship between them. One was dying and the other wanted their soul.

I like this line a lot "I used to be one of them but not anymore". I liked how he came back everyday to sit with her. I know he wanted her soul but I think he did it for her too. It seems like she didn't really have anybody and he was there until the end.

Overall I really liked this. The picture and title were nice too. :)

Aww this was so beautiful and sad. I loved how it flowed so nicely and your description was amazing. Poor Purity. Great job dear. No, I've never written anything that made me cry or even read anything that made me cry. It's hard to make me cry lol. I did feel the emotion of this story though, you're a great writer

Oh dear, this is so beautiful! I really loved this and your writing!

I love how different your writing style is :)
This one amazed me and made me feel sad:(

Okay, Its official I love you and your writing, this made me cry so hard! I've always loved names like Purity, Faith, Hope, Grace and this story is just one that I will read over and over. The ending and the way she told him to fly free made me cry I didn't cry until you said his face was filled with tears then I lost it and cried. It's okay though I needed a good cry!

THIS WAS BEAUTIFUL. NO NEED TO WORRY, IT'S JUST RAINING ON MY FACE BECAUSE I JUST CAME BACK FROM A FEEL TRIP. TOTALLY NOT CRYING OR ANYTHING.

This was so touching, and I love her name because it fits her. Your writing is paced well throughout the story and I like how you describe his voice as "a soft whisper of a mother singing a goodnight song to her sleeping baby." I thought that was a nice image. I loved this. It deserves a recommendation! Great job!

Aw, This was like so sad! :
It was really good though. <3

Wow. This was really soft and touching. I love how he stayed by her side until the day she died, and she wished for him to go back to Heaven. I'm sure Purity will meet him again in heaven.

the perfect blend of magic and sci-fi and touching to the heart. ;-;
i loved this. it was quiet, but not shy. it was concise and luminescent and quiet. (sorry for being dramatic, i'm a creative writer)
i've not read the first 18 stories though.
purity's character seems to me humanity incarnate - needing love, craving attention, helpless in the long run but strong of mind and heart. i liked her, and i rarely like female characters because they're usually badly done.
maybe i'll read the other million and nine stories in this series. ;)
cheers,
james