Black - Comments

@ Lulie Belle
Thank you for pointing that out to me. I didn't go over this much as much as I should have in the editing department.
You are awesome. Thank you.

I read the first chapter of this and the biggest mistake I saw was... "Such hurry and fear laced in her voice then it would make even angels would stifle tears." the ending should be even angles stifle their tears.

Other than that I like this. I want to know what's happening and what Marcine is going to do after the first chapter. I'm subscribing and rec'ing this :)

@ it's festive monroe.
Thank you for pointing that out, dear! I'm glad you liked it. I wanted to try something new and I was tired of making happy characters. :p Merry Christmas. ::hugs:

Merry Christmas!

That last sentence in the summary should read "as he just..[. s]tood there".
I love how tough Marcine is, and I liked how the story started off with a bit of an introduction to her life and relationship with her brother - even if he did die. I think Andrew is my favourite, I actually like how awful he was being to Cyrena as he saved her life.

@ Harleen Jingles.
Awh you're so welcome!! :)
It totally worked!!
Okay!! Good!

@ Artist Vs. Poet
Seriously I don't even know how to reply to that. This makes what I do so worth it. Nobody has ever said that before.

Really? Those were an afterthought. I'm glad it works with the story.

Thank you bunches my dear! I should have more up soon. :3

You're one of my favorite writers here on Mibba so I'm glad you reced this to me!

What first drew me in oddly was the chapter descriptions!

The plot was great and has a really good feel to it. You're certainly a great writer and I'm gonna recommend this one!!

@ Harleen.
Sweeetttt thanks doll :)

@ Lokison.
Oooh! I've been looking for something to read as of recent. And the links are conveniently placed in your signature? Pshht, consider it done.

@ Harleen.
You're welcome lovely :D
Feel free to read my Loki story any time and I'd highly say read There is a House too :) I'm most proud of them both :)

@ Lokison.
This is probably one of the best comments I've ever gotten on my work. I was hesitant about posting because I felt like I should have given more about Cyrena but I'm glad it worked out alright that way. I was trying to keep that chapter more centered around Luke than anything else. I really hope you have the time to read the next few, as I will be introducing "Death" very soon. Thank you for the comment love! ^-^

Your second story to be commented on by the lovely me :)

I really enjoyed reading this story. You just threw me right into battle of a world I'm sure I'll learn to understand and love along the way.

You putting me as a reader through a siblings death scene like Luke's is great and smart move, pulling readers into the story even more because readers can relate better that way.

the plot seem interesting and you know where you're going with this. It's something different and I hope other people realize this is a very well written story idea you have up my dear.