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  • Innocently Naughty

    Innocently Naughty (100)

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    I liked your other story but I like this one a lot better maybe make a layout for it though I think it sets the mood a lot better.
    June 27th, 2014 at 02:40pm
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    The story itself is good, it's very original which means you put a lot of thought into it. My only suggestion would be to separate the dialogue between characters, its pretty difficult at times to figure out who's talking, not to mention it gives what they say more of an impact. Keep up the good work!
    May 28th, 2014 at 03:46am
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