February 15th, 2014 at 08:06pm
Why Do I Love You? Contest
The story emanated a lot of emotion. With very little dialogue, you were able to give a lot of information about the character. With your style of writing this story, the readers are able to emphasize with her –it’s as if we can see ourselves in this story as well.
The layout is completely dark and mystical. When I looked at your layout, everything was either gray or black. It was appropriate for the story and you already gave the setting through the image itself. You didn’t give a lot in the layout which is good because the audience will be looking forward to reading your story.
Although your story was really emotional, the story completely drew me in the end. I only found myself really intrigued with the it when I read what happened at the end of the story. I think it depends on a person’s point of view and how he/she will decipher what you’ve written. By the way, I truly smiled when I read the last part because it was very sweet. Deep inside, I wish I had that kind of scenario. It would be embarrassing, yeah, but a one of a kind experience.
I saw a few grammatical errors in the story. They only included your sentence construction and the use of punctuation marks. Other than that, the story was great to read.
Aww, this story is super sweet. I love the emotion poured into it because it makes the readers feel sad for her and you can feel the regret and sadness emitting from the character. I love how you showed and not told the readers how this character was feeling and how much she missed her boyfriend.
I only wish the text was a bit bigger because it was a bit hard to read. Other than that I loved this.
I absolutely love the ending. I love happy ending and this one made me smile. I'm glad he came back.