XY Revolution - Comments

I'm confused about Julia and the doctor, that came out of nowhere
Yay for Kevin, though you're distracting me with this Rebecca chick.... I'm just anxiously awaiting someone to try to steal Travis from Freya And nope, she's not into him either Freya needs another challenge to take on, especially since she clearly likes him!
I do feel like I'm getting a little lost with your minor characters though. Not sure if that's because of how infrequently/inconsistently I'm reading the story, or if it's something you might have to look out for

Don't you dare introduce another girl like this I won't let her have Travis! He's Freya's, end of story!
My eyes were glued to that action scene the whole time and hence lack of commentary Well done on another exciting chapter, and I hope to see another update soon!

Ooooh a new layout Super pretty pic!
Oh my gosh, Travis just becomes more and more amazing the more I read about him, and I love that dude to pieces
What on earth was Phil checking.... I'm suspicious
I feel like there's going to be a traitor amongst them, after that talk from Naomi.
Can't wait for another mission and to see Freya kick ass and succeed again! I like your analogy to a chessboard, since that's really clear and easy to see and understand. And as always, you're building up tension and excitement and I just can't wait to read more! So keep on writing and update soon!

So happy to have found this story! It is so unique and well written! I am officially subscribed. Please update soon!

Eerie video... I could see it so well in my head and it was good to be taken back to the start of Freya's journey too.
HE SAID SHE WAS PERFECT AND IT MADE HER SILENT
Jeez, I'm shivering with the whole hip thing
BUT Travis ran his hand through her hair and held her to his chest so he just needs to keep on making his moves
Ok dude this is not funny. You can't give me cute Travis moments and then horrid physical pain! But at least he stayed with her the whole time. This is such a back and forth comment, I apologise
Didn't see any of this coming, and can't even begin to imagine what you have in store next More soon please!

What a relief for Kevin that he got saved, though I'm not sure just how much better sanctions will be for him
Ooooh, lots of secretive code words for everything
Just pointing out that I like the way you style your paragraphs - having "she sighs" by itself really made it stand out and have a greater impact. I admire the way that you can do that
Oh Travis, being all cute and stuff as he asks her to follow him
And damn, he has such a good point. She has to be the opposite of those Ideal girls and show her scars that she got while fighting for what she believes in. I'm glad he has his head screwed on straight
*insert my typical statement here saying that I really loved the update and would like another one soon*

Holy moly!
This story is incredible!!
This has become, no word of a lie, my favourite story on mibba :3
I can see how you won NaNo(btw, congrats!) :)

Was going to make some comment on how awful it was that she had to see herself killing people and being such a monster, but now I'm totally distracted by that moment with Travis Not only am I glad that we've learnt more about him, but they are totally cute together and you know it!!! Give me more soon please!!!

Great story! Looking forward to future updates!

Great story! Looking forward to future updates!

Great story! Looking forward to future updates!

I'm in love with this story. It's so original, your main character is likable, it's well written and an interesting premise. I look forward to seeing more!

Yeah, I felt like it was rude and embarrassing for Henriette to do that I do hope her assessment goes well, though.
Phil was sweet
And a beautiful ceremony. I really felt like I was there, with both the scenery and the tone you were conveying. Nice work!

Awesome that she managed to do all of her sniping without messing up - I expected and hoped that it would go smoothly.
You did a nice job building up the tension during her shower and as she left!
I can't even imagine wearing heels that have blades that come out the front of them. I'd be worried they'd accidentally come out, and how to run in them afterwards
Damn it, I had a bad feeling that Xander would die
I don't quite understand why only one man had a gun in that room? Why were none of the others armed, and why him?
Yay she escaped! And with Travis! No doubt the next chapter, with the aftermath of all this, will be great!

I really like how you can describe things that she doesn't actually know what they are, but you do it in such a short and simple way that I know exactly what you're talking about, yet have some room for imagination. Like the garden, or the animal skin rug. It works really well, you're so talented to be able to do that
Her talk was interesting - it makes total sense that he would know she's not who she says she is. But I hope this doesn't ruin their plan or anything
Phew, it's a relief she's not killing so many people! Hopefully her new task is much easier to do!
Whoop whoop, the classic 'here, let me show you how to use this weapon properly, and I'll touch your hands' technique Smooth, Travis, real smooth But no, she's far too focused on the gun
After an update like that, how can I not want more? Please update quicker this time!

Michaels seems a bit creepy to me, I hope he doesn't hurt her :(

Great, original story. This is what happens when men are in power, I tell you! Nah, I'm just kidding, but seriously, men haven't been very nice to us women in the past. Look at King Henry the Eight.

He forgot to cover her tattoo??? What??? Surely someone somewhere noticed that and shit will go down???
I love your descriptions of these expensive rooms - I can always picture them so perfectly
I was so hooked the entire time for that chapter. You must update soon! I have no idea what's going to happen next!

Finally you updated yayyyyy <3 great update btw ❤️❤️❤️❤️