A Will to Survive - Comments

Comment swap!
I was really excited to get a walking dead fic and I think you did it justice! I loved how you opened up your story with some background. It really helps the readers get to know the character that you are writing about. I love the description, as well. I think you do a great job of keeping everything flow nice, rather than chopped up by dialogue constantly (something I see often when I am reading stories on this website).
One criticism I do have, however, is the big paragraphs. I don't have a problem with them, as long as the paragraph pertains to the same subject. Some of the lengthier ones definitely can break up at some points and be their own shorter paragraphs. It'll help readers know when there is a change. For instance, I was confused in the flashbacks about the boots because it started to feel like it was present day because of the lengthier sections.
Oh, one more thing. Make sure you capitalize your "I's" and give the apostrophe in "I'll."
But that's all I have to comment on! Other than that, great story so far!

Comment swap!
I was really excited to get a walking dead fic and I think you did it justice! I loved how you opened up your story with some background. It really helps the readers get to know the character that you are writing about. I love the description, as well. I think you do a great job of keeping everything flow nice, rather than chopped up by dialogue constantly (something I see often when I am reading stories on this website).
One criticism I do have, however, is the big paragraphs. I don't have a problem with them, as long as the paragraph pertains to the same subject. Some of the lengthier ones definitely can break up at some points and be their own shorter paragraphs. It'll help readers know when there is a change. For instance, I was confused in the flashbacks about the boots because it started to feel like it was present day because of the lengthier sections.
Oh, one more thing. Make sure you capitalize your "I's" and give the apostrophe in "I'll."
But that's all I have to comment on! Other than that, great story so far!

Comment swap!
I was really excited to get a walking dead fic and I think you did it justice! I loved how you opened up your story with some background. It really helps the readers get to know the character that you are writing about. I love the description, as well. I think you do a great job of keeping everything flow nice, rather than chopped up by dialogue constantly (something I see often when I am reading stories on this website).
One criticism I do have, however, is the big paragraphs. I don't have a problem with them, as long as the paragraph pertains to the same subject. Some of the lengthier ones definitely can break up at some points and be their own shorter paragraphs. It'll help readers know when there is a change. For instance, I was confused in the flashbacks about the boots because it started to feel like it was present day because of the lengthier sections.
Oh, one more thing. Make sure you capitalize your "I's" and give the apostrophe in "I'll."
But that's all I have to comment on! Other than that, great story so far!

Love your story. Please update soon.

i love ur story keep it up updated soon plz i want to know more

Does anyone want me to continue this story I recently got some very negative feedback and I'm just feeling really discouraged. I'll only keep going if there are readers who are interested

Absolutely love this story! Update soon!

@ kaoscraze82
Oh my goodness your so sweet! Thankyou for continuing to read and it's such a big compliment since I know how passionately you ship caryl. But hey we can ship it right!

EEEEEEEEEE!!! You have just accomplished the impossible...I am routing for Daryl to fall in love with someone other than Carol!! Amazing job!!!

@ kaoscraze82
sweety its great to hear from you! and yes Lacy has hit rock bottom but that means there is only up from here. just you wait the next chapter is going to be a big one ;)

Sorry I haven't been able to talk to you lately but I am reading the story and it's coming alone really well. Definitely gotta get Lacy back to her old self again...you're killing my feels!! Great job!

I know I threw alot at you guys this chapter but we broke lacy now we get to see how she pulls back together. There's only up from here! @pourquoibella @dfk1017

Great chapter. Can't wait for part 2

Interesting update. Quite a bit happened so I look forward to the next chapter!

keep up the good work that your doing this story is amazing

Well done so far! Good luck writing!

Love it keep going :)

@whatshername924 im glad lacy isnt annoying its my biggest complaint about females in apocolyose stories they always end up whinnie little bitches.

I like Lacy, she's cool and not annoying lol and The way Daryl is portrayed is very accurate. Update soon please!

Next chapter will be out tomorrow
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