Psithurisma - Comments

The style of the story fits very well with the feeling that "god" is floating out there in the universe, tethered to everything that's been created. When I was reading, at first I thought I'd like to see times/dates that the emails were sent, but as I continued, it was obvious that we really didn't need them to understand how long they'd been emailing. This is such a quick read but it spans a larger time frame and it's really well done.

As for Steve, he's interesting because he's very much apart of the world, but at the same time, he's not. We never find out if he's really talking to anyone or anything at all, but it tells us so much about him either way. I'm surprised by how much I liked this. There's nothing that's expressly philosophical, but it's easy to pull that type of thought out of this. It really feels like it can go either way.

I loved it. The style and content are both equally beautiful. I spent a good 30 minutes reading this with no regrets! I also liked the little nicknames they have each other! Wally, Adam, Dog, Dodog, Dr. Steve Adam -- it was a nice touch.

@ XXXataktoulaXXX
Thank you! I don't mind if you dropped it; a hundred chapters and I would too.
Your comments are so helpful and wonderful. I like knowing mine and Nate's writing has made people think.

I'm very sorry that it took me so long to get to this. I had stopped reading at chapter 11 so I'm starting from the next one. I was supposed to get to this when you first started it but my schedule had been packed to say the least. Here I am now so don't kill me.

I like the last paragraph of chapter twelve, the way God speaks to Steve about if he really exists and that it might be just in his brain. It's something people about God, realistic to the bone. Nothing seems really if we don't believe at it or him.

I was confused at first of why Steve was talking to God about eating with his family, but the way you emphasized what his grandmother said, you're all here thanks to my vagina and the way you connected it with what he wanted to do in the future and his connections to the aliens was something else. I wasn't expecting that.

Chapter sixteen; God is really an idea for us humans and the way you had him realizing that for himself while talking to Steve was really good.

Chapter seventeen-eighteen; It's true that if he doesn't exist, then of course he can do nothing for us but I really can't think of a God who wouldn't want to help if he could do something.

Chapter nineteen-twenty; I can see that sometimes we look for God where he isn't, but just liek God said he is an idea (an idea we created to have something to hold on when life isn't going the way we want it o go and the pain is too much; that's what I believe). So yes, most of us are atheists nowadays even if we think we believe.

By the way, what inspired this?

*I'll be reading the rest of it shortly.*

@ hawker!
Oh, thank you.
I'd like to maybe re-write it someday. With Nate of course.

This was beautiful and I don't know why but the ending made me sad, but in a good way. There's a perfect balance to this - between vague and specific, serious and funny, and everything about it was just so interesting.

Aweh. )':
Poor Nate, I guess.
And blog author.
That's just terrible. I wish people wernt as... Dick-ish (Grammatically correct? I don't think so... Oh well) period.

@ Cicero.
I don't know if it'll be possible... Nate was banned yesterday for being a dick to someone in a blog comment.

Wow.

I like this story.
I like walls.
I like rain.
I like life. Life is beautiful.
Just like this story.

I really liked how the story is layer out.
I really liked how you chose Steve to be emailing God.
The comforting, calming and exciting of this story is incredible.

I am looking forward to reading the sequel. And the sequels sequel. And the sequels sequels sequel. A infinite amount of sequels. If its possible.
If anything's possible, really.
If possibility's possible.

This story is great.
~<3 Detţs

@ fall0ut
All thank you and the guy who's doing a review for it on the mag said, "Oh fuck no." when he saw the chapter count xD

@ fall0ut
Thank you! Yeah, the hundred chapters of Hikikomori scared me almost out of reading it, but I loved it and hence Psithursma.

Awesome job. At first I was a little apprehensive, seeing as there's 100 chapters, but once I saw the style I was comforted, haha. It's very impressive and very insightful; I feel like it's definitely an introspective story that really makes the reader think. Throughout the story I found myself either agreeing or disagreeing with Steve or God--maybe that's because I'm also an athiest but whatever. Anyway, I really enjoyed it. Thanks for letting me know this little gem exists. You both are very talented.

@ hephaestus
Hearing that from you is a pretty great thing, mate. Thanks. c:
I think it's my turn, really, I should update it.

@ ions
I have already read through it and eagerly await it to resume its active status.
you guys are both fantastic. it would be a privilege to write with either of you one day.
keep up the good work

@ hephaestus
Wow. Thank you so much.
I'm so looking forward to that! There's even a sequel. It's not been active in awhile though.

Hello, I wanted to let you know that I have chosen to review this particular story for the Mibba Magazine. I'll message one of you more about this as it is written and then posted in January.

Chapters 1 - 10: This isn't what I expected this story to be. I like it. I've never read the Bear Parade series but perhaps I should because I like the style. I really like the banter between god and steve. It's both simple and intriguing.

Chapters 11 - 20: I'll be honest, I don't quite know if I like the approach this is taking any more. I feel as if Steve is being much too bitter, and feel as if god is being even more bitter. For an idealized deity who promotes love and peace, he sure wishes a lot of misfortune on Steve. Then again, I feel as if Steve is just talking to himself anyway, because even if he were praying, he'd get no reply. I don't know, I like that I don't entirely like this. It's different and I can appreciate that. I mean, I'm an atheist as well, but even I'm not as bitter about this nonexistent god thing.

Chapter 21 - 30: I'm beginning to feel warmer to this story. I mean, I think Steve is warming up to 'God,' even if he says he doesn't believe in him. And that's what I like. I am an atheist but sometimes when I'm at the bottom of my emotional slope, I can't help but pray to 'God' to make it better. I know it's a lost cause but I like the idea that maybe, just maybe, there is one person out there listening to my tiny plea. Idk. Also, the banter is still really funny.

Chapter 31 - 40: Okay, I think I officially like this story. I believe what I love about it most is that it circles back to something quite often; walls. I truly like when stories do that. Like Catcher in the Rye with the ducks, and this story with walls. I look forward to more.

Chapters 41 - 50: "wally. like walls." i love that line more than anything so far. ugh that's all i have to say about this set. It's perfect.

*Chapter 57: I feel like this chapter is a bit inconsistent. He says he doesn't know what a 'blow job' is, but earlier, he'd received one. And being a doctor and all by now, I feel like he'd be smart enough to know a name for it.

Chapters 51 - 60: i'm running out things to praise that I already haven't, and running out of things to criticize. I like this, that's all. I like the way their relationship is developing.

*Chapter 69: I think this is an error; "we i started..."

Chapters 61 - 70: this is still lovely~

Chapters 71 - 80: haha i'm dying steve just put the moves on his non-existing god lol he asked to rim him ahahahahahahahaha

Chapters 81 - 90: I really want Steve to kill himself on Mars. That sounds bad but that's an opportunity that I would refuse to miss if I were him.

Chapters 91 - End: fantastic end. I really enjoyed it, you guys have done well.

@ holland road
@ prayers.
ahhh thank you guys c:

Wow well--
I just read this in one go and I need a moment to get more eloquent ahaha

But no, on more serious note, this is not the first time I've come across similar writing, but first time I've read something like this and I loved it.

I don't really know what I could say that would be constructive omg
But-
Love the writing style and love the content. The ideas and conversations are amazing even though I got like.
One reference xD

i just read this entire thing and i'm actually in love, wow

@ wonderyear?
got that right!!

and thank you!