Figured I'd give this a read since you're passionate as hell about OF. Cryptic last sentence is cryptic, but I liked it. And the name Atlas is excellent symbolism. I approve. Overall, it didn't give too much way, but it gave just enough details to be interesting and set up for the next chapter. Only spotted one error, which would be "puppy god" instead of "puppy dog." Other than that, everything seemed good. This premise made me flash back to Inkheart.
December 4th, 2013 at 08:22am