Uncharted Territory - Comments

poor josh but damn jealousy is mighty green

Aw my poor bby Josh. I would never ever ever leave him for a surfer guy.
Blondes are my thang ;)
He was so cuteeeeee being all jealous. And even cuter at the end - "You swear?"
OH I SWEAR BABY I SWEAR

'clinically proven' :D I attest to that tho :P
So hey! I'm new here (to the story that is) and it's amazing! Can't wait for more! Def sub :)
Update soon!<3

'clinically proven' :D I attest to that tho :P
So hey! I'm new here (to the story that is) and it's amazing! Can't wait for more! Def sub :)
Update soon!<3

Hi, hey, hello, this is me coming to publicly stalk your stories. I'm starting with Josh because yeah, Josh. And the layout is just beautiful.

[with this ring]

I love the way you start this off. It instantly has this really cute and humorous tone and it sets the scene really well. I instantly get this really lovely picture of the welcoming party as well. I think I relate to the way you describe it really well -- I always hate massive gatherings like weddings and stuff because it's overly-crowded and there are just too many people I don't know there. The best part of the night for me is taking off my heels, ha!

I get a really good sense of Erin throughout the chapter and I like that. I instantly have this image of Natalie being a bit of a...a pious bitch though, and I've only read a tiny bit about her. She just comes off as one of those atypical bimbos that I really dislike straight from the get-go. I don't know if she'll get a chance in the coming chapters!

The only negative thing I noticed in this chapter was hors devours, which should be hors d'oeuvres, unless there's a difference between the British English and the American English for that.

[i take thee]

Oh gosh, Erin is totally me. Rehearsal dinners always confused me. Why have a rehearsal of how you're going to eat? I'm probably totally wrong on what a rehearsal dinner actually is but it always confused me and I'm delighted to see that Erin is the same. It just makes her all that more relatable as a character, or at least it does to me!

Josh's mum seems like a real sweetheart! I imagine her as this lovely homely woman who has a nice word to say about everyone. I think she's my favourite so far because I imagine she gives great hugs.

[to have and to hold]

Catching fireflies. I am so 500% done with this already. Why is Josh not marrying Erin? That's the cutest thing I've ever heard.

In all seriousness though, I love that you're adding in little things from their childhood within the chapters. It adds this whole new dimension to their relationship and it does give this essence of history off.

WHAT IS NATALIE DOING? WHY? HOW? I CAN'T EVEN. I don't understand why you'd jump on someone else if you were marrying Josh Hutcherson. I mean, unless the other person was Jensen Ackles or Dougie Poynter, but that's veeeeeery unlikely. I just...I knew she was nasty. Had it pegged from day dot. I intensely dislike her and I know that there's no way she's getting a chance in my mind now.

[from this day forward]

I'm so glad that the first sentence is what I read moving on. I was kind of worried that Erin would keep it hidden and let Josh marry Natalie. Then again, I'm commenting purely on the first paragraph so who knows what'll happen. And now Josh is shirtless.

Honestly, I'm heartbroken for Josh. He's such a sweetheart throughout the chapters and for Natalie to go and do that to him is absolutely unbelievable. I'm really interested to see how he'll fully react once he's confronted Natalie. I think it'll make for really good (albeit horrible) reading.

[for better]

Out of all the things I was expecting, Josh yelling isn't something I can imagine at all but these sort of things make people go a little crazy so I reckon it might be something that would actually happen. His rash decision to try and get Erin to run way is another thing that I think is really interesting because it almost gives me the idea that he just runs away from any problems, a really interesting character twist there. It gives him this flaw, which I think a lot of people miss out when writing fanfiction. Everyone has flaws and I like that his actions give that idea of him being flawed. Either that or I need to stop reading into things as much as I do.

I'm really interested to see what will happen in the Bahamas. I hope a certain pair get together. If they don't my little shipper heart will break in half. Just warning you.

[for worse]

I keep getting this strictly platonic vibe off of the current relationship and it makes me so angry. I just want to fly over to the Bahamas and push them both together. Like...."NOW KISS". Yup. SO MUCH sexual tension. They should just get together already.

I love that they have this little flirty banter thing going on between them. It's one of those things that develops over years of knowing someone (heck, I have flirty banter with my female friends even though we're all straight as rulers) and it's just so cute in this instance. I can't get over how much I love the two of them together, romantically or just as friends.

[for richer]

The dinner sounds absolutely beautiful. I love how you introduce it straightaway in the way that you do because I get this wonderful image of this super-romantic meal and it just seems absolutely beautiful in my mind. And to counter that, I get this super-adorable awkward thing between Josh and Erin and it's like the very startings of a romantic relationship and that makes me so happy. As I have mentioned, I need them to get together for the sake of my own sanity.

[overall]

WHY ARE THEY NOT TOGETHER YET KATIE? WHY?

In all honesty though, I love this. I don't think I've read a story where it starts with a wedding being called off, that usually comes towards the end so I think it's a really interesting concept to read about. I'm interested to see if there will be any fallout from Natalie's side and whether Erin and Josh will get together (hint: if they don't I'm going to cry) and if so, how. I think they'd be really good together.

Lovely character development, really vivid description and barely any grammar errors that I could find when I was reading. I'm hooked, I'm really interesting to see where this is going!

But really I bet Josh's hips move pretty nice doing other things I mean wey hey. But really, can he get over Natalie and just mack on Erin because they're obviously perfect and she obviously can't say no to his face so like whatever?

I think I know why Josh is taking so long

Also, no one can cay no to that precious little face- I mean, really.

oh but Josh?!?!?!
I'm in love!
Please update soon?!

What the fuck man?!
Okay, okay I'm gonna go in peace, but goddammit!

Okay, deep breaths...
UPDATE. NOW.
I need to know whats gonna happen and this cliffhanger its helping

Ufffffff.
Now, the wait..

If I dont comment on the next one. I died.
Died of waiting for an update..

I WOULD DO WHATEVER HE ASKED OF ME
LITERALLY ANYTHING HE COULD ASK - HE COULD HAVE IT AND THEN SOME
AND HIS HANDS CAN STAY ON MY HIPS FOREVER

Even that made me squee and want to dance with josh

I love a good Josh story, and this is definitely a good one. Can't wait to see what happens in the Bahamas :)

I'm in love with this. Josh is adorable and so sweet. And who can resist shirtless Josh, I mean really.
I love their relationship and the flirting is really cute.
I can't wait for more!

Josh...shirtless
Can I have him?!

"It's time for you to feed me."

I tell my roommate this on a constant basis.

awwwww that was so cute the two of them flirting

He can literally oogle me ANY TIME HE WANTS.
I'll get rid of the bikini, too.
HE IS SO FLIRTY AND PERFECT AND I WANT HIM AND THIS CHEERED ME UP CONSIDERABLY
JOSH SHIRTLESS ...
I would KILL to be on a beach with him right now.

Natalie's ass better stay gone wtf is this ominous 'for now' can it be a permanent 'adios bitchachos?'

Wait, what do you mean by "for now"!!?!
That bitch better be gone for good or her face is gonna collide against my fist! She dared to cheat on Josh! For all I know she's a walking corpse, girl.
Oh yes, getaway to the Bahamas! And then babies!!

Too soon?

Katie.
I don't like what this winky face of yours is implying.

I will however bask in the trip the the Bahamas with Joshua.
The thought of him shirtless should keep me calm for now.