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  • blissfulmelancholy

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    @ writing_wrongs
    ok i will definitely try that :)
    December 16th, 2013 at 11:14pm
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    Try not to adress the reader in order to explain things. It disrupts the flow. Instead try to work facts into dialogue or descriptions
    December 16th, 2013 at 05:42am
  • xnightchangesx

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    @ blissfulmelancholy
    You're welcome. :)
    December 16th, 2013 at 01:53am
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    @ joeyschick367

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    Thanks guys! You're so sweet! Mr. Green Mr. Green
    December 16th, 2013 at 12:46am
  • joeyschick367

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    It's great and very well written! Looking forward to the next chapter :)
    December 15th, 2013 at 11:55am
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    I love it, can't wait for next chapter. (:
    December 15th, 2013 at 07:49am
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