Beautiful Mess - Comments

@ Summerdais
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あなたはかれ好きですか?

@ onlyme_1998
Aww thank you so much And I based Matt's character off of someone I have a current crush on so I can understand how maybe someone would fall in love with him as I have XD If that makes any sense... But anyways, thank you for the wonderful feedback and I do hope that you will keep looking forward to the rest of the story!

I am really loving the story, it makes me happy in a weird kind of sad way that makes me wish I had a friend like Matt. But I know if I did I would fall madly in love with him. I can not wait to reaf more of this storu, so please update soon.
-Gem

I can agree with you that my summary should be a little bit more clear; I've just been too lazy to make it better I can agree that the things I have written that Matthew has said is super offensive, but of course I don't mean anything that I write. I'm only emphasizing how mad Matthew is, basically, at the world after all he's been through. Even I would bat the same way if I went through what he went through. And he doesn't really follow any religion, so I wrote it as he didn't know anything but he still said something.

I'm sorry that I've made you upset, but I promise things are going to get better as I write farther into the story. **SPOILER ALERT** Matthew changes for the better good thanks to Avery, Candice, and some new friends of his that I will be introducing starting from chapters four or five; so if you'd like to, you could stick around and skip chapter 3 and begin reading on But if not, I can completely understand where you're coming from and I'd like to apologize.

Thank you for the feed back though, I really do appreciate it!

I'm a bit confused at who is narrating this story. Why are they so angry and swearing? If they are a third person (read: all knowing voice) narrator they should know more about the situation.

If you can, it would be good to clean up your summary. The emotion that comes through is interesting, but it is a bit confusing to read when the tenses are unclear and the narrator could be the guy or the girl or a third person. Do you know what I mean?

I started reading your story. You're saying things that are really insensitive to religion. Not only to Christianity, but to Islam as well. You do know that Christians believe that God has taken a son and Jews believe in one God right? :'( I was looking forward to your story especially from KingSquishy's comment, but I won't read something so disrespectful of people's beliefs. Even if it is a story...I'm upset.

This is great. Psychological. I love psychology (I am training to be a psychologist and represent the British Psychological Society) so :) If you need any help I'll happily be there