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  • Lynda414

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    He he, I think a Gabriel dream might be arranged later, or at least a daydream... And yes Angie likes Kieran, but there is another reason she doesn't put herself in those dreams. It's subconscious and stems from her own issues.

    Fun fact: that phrase is complete plagiarism. I'll prolly change it when I publish, but its from a song. YouTube Meatloaf's - You Took The Words Right Outta My Mouth. Play the 5:06 one. I've had that song in my writing playlist since book three precisely because of the opening.

    Another fun fact: The car dream was not caused by influence. Angie has a lot of stuff to work through. I kinda feel bad for her...
    April 18th, 2014 at 09:02am
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    @ Lynda414
    I think it is fitting for Angie to have a dream about Gabriel and Kieran. She does find Kieran attractive, just Gabriel is #1.

    I love the dream she has in 7 though, the phrase Gabriel repeats is really cool. Like a child's nursery rhyme but... sensual.
    April 18th, 2014 at 06:41am
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    @ Lynda414
    Gabriel's dream? Please do. *_*
    April 18th, 2014 at 06:24am
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    Noooo, it's too soon! I must tease you all some more! uh, I mean, I'm building up to it! Yeah... >_>

    I'm hoping none of this sexyness is seeming overly gratuitous. Like I'm forcing it in, because that's not how I feel. This is where the story is at, it's taken a sexy turn!

    And there's a very good reason Angie doesn't put herself in her dreams with Gabriel. Her doing that would definitely be out of character.

    Though I guess I could have written Gabriel's dream... >_>
    April 16th, 2014 at 11:47pm
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    Aw poop, I was hoping there was going to be Angie/Gabriel sexytime *pout*
    April 16th, 2014 at 10:55pm
  • Lynda414

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    *steeples fingers* A perv you say? I see we are kindred spirits. I'll be honest, I didn't want to stop the scene in chapter 6 where I did...
    Oh yeah, what did you think?
    April 16th, 2014 at 10:48pm
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    OhmYGOD I would cry. I would seriously break down into tears of joy. OMGYES

    And yes, make two versions~! I'm a perv, I'll admit it.
    April 16th, 2014 at 10:42pm
  • Lynda414

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    When I publish the first book I should offer signed copies to my best fans. *muses* This gives me an excellent idea... I wonder if it's against Mibba's policy to offer physical goods to my best reviewer...
    April 16th, 2014 at 04:23pm
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    Yep, rated R at least. I know I can go to NC17 on here, but FictionPress only goes to 'just before explicit'. I'm considering doing two versions. It depends on where the story goes.

    Thank you! I would LOVE more feedback, and I love new readers. But man, book 1... So many mistakes in that one... I'm almost done rewriting it for publication, it's going to be so much better and I added some new stuff!
    April 16th, 2014 at 11:28am
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    Also, I sent your story to a friend and she is in the process of reading it. I'm hoping she'll comment eventually.
    HURRY UP, MEGHAN. CATCH UP AND TELL LYNDA HOW WONDERFUL SHE IS.
    April 16th, 2014 at 07:48am
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    Mature?! Oh boy. I'm waiting in anticipation. :D
    April 16th, 2014 at 07:46am
  • Lynda414

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    *fingers steepled* Yessss, I have pleased you.
    >_> Wait till he gets a hold of 'Second Blood'
    April 11th, 2014 at 08:46pm
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    His notes were wonderful. I was DYING.
    April 11th, 2014 at 08:32pm
  • Lynda414

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    Hehe, yes. Gotta make sure my readers are paying attention. ^_^
    Did you like his little notes???
    I really wish mibba let me do text formatting, the fictionpress version if his editing looks so much better...
    April 11th, 2014 at 07:56pm
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    I completely forgot that she is usually the kissed and never the kisser... until him. So cute :3
    April 11th, 2014 at 07:35pm
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    @ Squirky
    I think of Vivian as this really cool mom who's blunt and practical, but Angie's personality is totally at odds with it so they clash all the time. She's fearless too. Sometimes I think she's what Katrina could have been if she'd settled down and had kids instead of becoming Gabriel's gatekeeper.

    The chapter was running long so I'm gonna be adding excerpts of 'First Blood' in the next chapter. I just gotta release my inner terrible-fanfic writer.
    April 10th, 2014 at 02:59am
  • Squirky

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    I love Vivian, she's truly something else! I, too, wanna know what he wrote, and I'm sure the events to follow will not be a disappointment in the ammusing department. ;)
    April 10th, 2014 at 02:26am
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    I WON'T LEAVE YOU IN SUSPENSE LONG.
    April 10th, 2014 at 01:14am
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    I WANNA KNOW WHAT HE WROTE!!! >_<
    April 10th, 2014 at 12:41am
  • Lynda414

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    *fist pump* oh yeah, I've still got it. ^_^
    April 10th, 2014 at 12:19am