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  • KingSquishy

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    @ ShadowCorpus
    Good idea, take Shrewsbury's point of view. Maybe thinking back to before the marriage discussions? :) I like that idea!
    May 2nd, 2014 at 08:24pm
  • ShadowCorpus

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    I like it so far =) I think the diction works well for the time period. I think for the next chapter it should maybe give some backstory to the protagonist or her father? Maybe switch point of view to the father? Good start though X)
    May 2nd, 2014 at 08:22pm
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