Summer Has Come and Passed - Comments

Nice chapter, Vienna has returned home, I wonder what will happen next and if she'll speak with Mike. Paul is a cool, pretty laid back character, maybe he'll be in other chapters? Haha, anyways, I liked this one. Looking forward to the next. P.s. Jonas Brothers is a name I haven't heard in a while like a blast from the past, just hearing the name makes me all nostalgic.

After a year away, that would be absolutely nerve-wracking. Not so much facing family, but everyone else...Her first time seeing Billie should be interesting. Needless to say, I'm on the edge of my seat here! Literally. I think I'll just sit here until you update. Lol. I can't wait for more, madam!

@ white elephants.

I love you, too, and I love this story!

@ Mrs. McCarron

Mrs. McCarron:

Letting it all out, it's like draining poison straight out of your mind and heart. (:

I love this, that saying is just fabulous. Omg. And I love you, omg. you're so sweet.

I'm glad that Vienna has re-established contact with Mike, but I wish that she could do so without thinking constantly about BJ. I get it, of course, I just hate her having to go through that. Talking to someone is probably a good thing. Letting it all out, it's like draining poison straight out of your mind and heart. (:

Kris seems like a pretty cool character, maybe she'll become an important character later on? I'm glad though that Vienna has contact with Mike

But no. No no no this is my favorite story ever and I'm beginning to die I think help but don't actually bc this story is worth it. Goodnight and post again soon so I don't die 8 billion more times as I try to sleep.

Aaannnnddd... The phonecall was Mike, as much as I love Mike and he's my favorite Green Day member, I couldn't help but feel a little disappointed that it wasn't Billie. Haha, this tells me you are really good at writing emotions and tricking the reader.
Ps. Love how Ashley looks, love her already as a character

It has been a year...and BLAM, Billie is about to come crashing back into her life. Oh, man. DRAMA LLAMAS! But I really can't wait for them to talk to each other again. Or see each other. Whichever.

Love this story! It may have taken a while for you to update, but it was worth the wait. =)

Phonecall? + “Some guy from California” = Billie.

I cannot even begin to describe how amazing this story is. I know I've said it before but every update still manages to leave me stunned and waiting for more, well done! I love your writing skills, the realism and just the bold, loving personality of your protagonist. Vienna is a amazing character, she is beutifully described by her amazing author. Looking forward to the next update

Excuse me, what the fuck is my heart. Seriously, you wrote that last half so perfectly I want to hate you, but I can't because I love you too much. You have such a beautiful writing style and I am absolutely addicted to this story. I love that you didn't separate them for the usual reasons in Green Day fics (cheating, cheating, cheating!). Such a fabulous choice that proves how inspired you are! It's hard to write such a realistic story without the usual flashy drama and still keep everyone (including you) invested, but you've succeeded...so well.

I don't blame him for being pissy about it all. In fact, I am on his side, for the most part. He supported her in wanting to go to college, but to have her hide something from him and to study across the country is a bit uncalled for. If he began to tour, it'd be even harder for them to see each other because is down time would be, by default, in California. I don't care if she was scared, she needed to be open with him. She probably ruined her summer by internally obsessing over it. Goodness, I wish I could go in and smack these kids into shape!

So well done! Love it! xxx

Noooooooooooooo! That...God...I can't even respond. I don't even know what to say. I can't believe she knew the whole time and didn't tell him. And I know he's hurting, but I hope he finds it in himself to forgive her for keeping that secret. He needs to be supportive of her future, the same as she's been about his. I know I'm flip-flopping and not picking a side. Lol. It's just that I can see both of their perspectives.

Loved it, ma'am!

That does sound like an epic birthday. Too bad we're not hitting a carnival for my birthday this weekend. Lol. My favorite part was when Lisa asked if the bottle really weighed forty pounds. That was great.

I'm just gonna tell you something right here right now. OMG THAT CHAPTER IS SO MUCH LIKE ONE I HAVE BEEN WRITING FOR MY STORY UGH I LOVE IT GREAT MINDS THINK A LIKE WTH IT'S TRUE. No joke, when I read her seeing the couple running I was like "IT'S MY BABIES OUT ON THE TOWN BUT ONLY I KNOW IT."

Now that that is over, let me tell you another thing. The tension is actually cutting me like for real. Something is gonna be so bad and I'm going to be so upset and it kinda makes my tummy hurt in anticipation. You're really phenomenal at foreshadowing and building suspense.

However, I think something you should consider focusing on is description. You're not void of it, but it's lacking in some areas. It stood out to me at the end of the last chapter. I felt like there was so much more to be said and done that was squashed by the sheer quickness of it. The entire section was very speedy. Even so, it seems to be your writing style, for the most part, and that's okay. Sometimes, you are completely in-depth, and the variation is slightly confusing to an analytic reader. It's tricky business, but you are still an excellent writer and ignoring this tip won't hurt you, per se.

I quite adore their interaction, as many other commenters said. They have this realistic and quirky quality about being bf/gf that makes them a treat to read. It's much like that one couple everyone thinks will be married eventually. Unfortunately, though, that one couple is notorious for ending messily. We'll have to wait and see!

I'll have more to say soon enough.

I enjoy reading about the two of them together. I like seeing what they get up to, and they are just so darn adorable together. I can't wait for more!

I laughed so hard reading this, especially the part where she's like “Your big mouth was sucking out all the nicotine anyways” haha well done XD

Uhh now I'm on the edge of my seat awaiting more chapters, what will happen I wonder?

@ charmishgirl
I'm trying my best to not come off as rude. but you saying I stole my first chapter from the video is more than insulting.

I originally wrote this story back in 2010. So I'm just re-doing it.

I watched the video. And I will say it's similar, very similar.

I got the idea from the song and video. I did not plagiarize. It'd be plagiarism if it were word from word. But it is not.

Billie's dialogue is the only thing which sounds remotely close to the monologue of the male lead in the video. Vienna does not.

If I seem rude or anything with this response, I actually apologize.I don't want to seem rude or mean to you, I don't know you. But I will not be called a person who plagiarizes.

I will defend myself and my writing. For that, I do not apologize.

http://youtu.be/NU9JoFKlaZ0 you totally used the monologue from the video! You added some dialogue to it but the monologue the guy says and the monologue the girl says is there.

@ charmishgirl
Actually I didn't get my dialogue from WMUWSE. The story itself I got the idea from just the song, totally. But I didn't use it from the video. But I'm glad ya like it.