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HOW DID I NOT EVEN KNOW YOU WERE WRITING AN INFINITE STORY THANK YOU FOR PUTTING THIS AS YOUR MIBBAWEEN TREAT FROM ME.

I don't know if I ever said this, but one of my favorite things about your stories is how you come up with these amazing AUs. Not only that, but you execute writing them so well I am forever in awe of your talent.

But omg Nara sounds super precious and I think it's adorable how protective Dongwoo is of her. Plus Sungjonggie and his crush!! And then broody Myungsoo and sassy Hoya are the best combination.

On another note, Woohyun and Sungyeol sound terrifying and wow anticipating them and the face-off with Hoya and Myungsoo to come...

Dongwoo is definitely my favorite character in the story. His care for Nara is my favorite. BUT THE FACT THAT HE AND SUNGGYU ARE FRIENDS I CAN'T!!!! And Sunggyu being creepy with Nara ugh someone stop him.

MYUNGSOO NOW KNOWS WOOHYUN AND SUNGYEOL ARE OUT AND ABOUT I'M SO INTO THIS STORY NIKKI WOW I'M EXCITED

So I saw this was a fanfiction, but I have no idea what it's from. This is different, but rather good. I quite enjoy your style of writing. You had a few mistakes, but it didn't distract from the overall story. The names, in my opinion, were kind of hard to keep up with so that took away from the story, as I kept having to go back to see exactly who was who. Other than that, this was well written.

Sunggyu just- Where do I even start? The fact that he's got everyone fooled makes me want to shake everyone in the hospital and ask what's wrong with them. How can they not see him for what he is? I was rather surprised honestly, by his friendship with Dongwoo and quickly appalled by the fact that he uses it to get closer to Nara. That Dongwoo actually encourages it in a way is appalling to a degree. I understand that it's his friend so obviously he doesn't see his true nature but still... & if Nara gets the creeper vibe from him, speak up girl! Or get the heck away from him because he is bad news for you as well as demonspawn evil.

As for Woohyun, goodness he's adorable and I kinda sorta want to cuddle him and never let go. With Sungyeol, however, no words can describe how badly I want him to meet an untimely end. How he could do that to his own brother and let him take the blame... Something is seriously wrong with him.

On another note, those pills that fixed Nara's legs (to a degree) and are messing with her hearing... Are they part of the same formula or formulas he used to create Myungsoo/Woohyun & Hoya/Sungyeol?

So so late in commenting on your last update, sorry! Gosh Myungsoo is the cutest thing, I swear! It was really sweet of him to stand up for Nara in such a manner and his interactions with her afterwards had me smiling. In all honesty, I think the interaction is good for both of them as Nara can hopefully find another friend in Myungsoo and he can learn more about interacting with humans properly by talking with her. It was also great to see Dongwoo and how greatly he cares for his sister. Though I must say his attitude towards the duo when Nara left them outside temporarily was shocking. It's understandable at the same time, but still...
I get why he doesn't trust anyone and why he's particularly wary of the boys, but I'm just glad he decided to let them stay.

However, I am concerned that the examinations he's scheduling for one (or was it both?) of them will turn up abnormally and thus cause him to question what they are.

Oh my gosh, I wish I could write as well as you! I'm always blown away by your work. You just have this incredible talent to make me feel like I'm right in the story feeling exactly what the characters are going through. I love Nara the most. She is incredibly frisky and fearless, and I tend to love characters like that. I'm glad that she has Myungsoo(I love that name!) around to protect her. I'm just going to read more, and then wait for updates!

Helllo! I'm here from my comment swap (thank you for you comment on my story by the way!)

Summary: That was actually adorable I love Nara's "I don't give a shit"-like attitude.

Prologue: Wow. This is really, reall interesting. I'm a sucker for these kind of stories! Myungsoo sounds strangle adorable. Something I noticed right away was that you have a proper balance between your dialogue and description and both do a great job of showing what's going on rather than telling. Kudos! There's also a lot of suspense to keep the reader on the edge of their seat.

Chapter 1 - Damn. The first two paragraphs break my heart Why are experiments always treated so poorly? I want to hug Myungsoo. I see Sunggyu didn't take his mother's love for Myungsoo very well. And poor Howon :( Your description in this chapter is exquisite and the characterization is too. It's nice knowing what exactly happened to Kim Soo Man and Kim Rae. Maybe that'll have an effect on Myungsoo later?

Chapter 2 - Again, this description is perfect. Finally Nara is introduced! I feel a little crush coming on in this story between Myungsoo and Nara I wonder what medical experiments she's a part of?

From what I read so far, you do have an intriguing story on your hands! It's beautifully told. You leave the reader always wanting more! The only nitpick I have is that your font is really small and difficult to read, but I'm not asking you to change it because this is just me. Other than that, this is amazing!

I'll be rec'ing and subscribing :)

I know how hard it can be to do introduction chapters, let alone do them well, however I'm happy to say that you accomplished both. Right from the start, I'm incredibly curious to find out what's going on-- you've given this chapter a movie-like vibe that was really cool and added to the suspense and intrigue of the story in all the right ways. And also, because of this, I was able to very clearly see and feel what was going on, and that can be a hard thing to do.

Another thing I was really happy to see was the proper balance between description and dialogue, another thing that added to my ability to visualize this chapter well. Not to mention, the use of metaphors/similies such as "snake-like hiss" and "wolf-like teeth". Some people underestimate the power they have and don't use nearly enough of them, but you used just the right amount.

One thing that I actually just noticed right now as I went to go look back on it, was the fact that this takes place at 12:45am rather than 'pm'. That adds a whole new edge to this chapter because what meeting takes place that late at night? Then again, with the nature of this meeting, it almost seems to make sense.

Overall, you've got a really great beginning to this story. You've done absolutely everything right, and everything well. Seems like the best stories on here often don't get the attention they deserve. x

I think I'm in love with Howon. Just had to throw that out there. Myungsoo's confusion over Nara being the cat's "mother" is cute as is his protectiveness over her. Regarding Sungyeol and Woohyun- Sungyeol and Howon are brothers?! I'm rather afraid of how that dynamic will play out if Howon and Sungyeol cross paths. As for their abilities I'm both in awe and horrified. Woohyun follows so obediently and Sungyeol less so but both put out devastating actions... I fear not only for the two escapees but for the civilians as well.

Also, because I can't forget about Sunggyu here, he's horrible! Shooting that poor researcher and being completely unaffected. How can anyone stand to work for him?

Howon hanging upside down from a tree branch is something I find very amusing. He's like a bat! which makes him even cuter to me because I think bats are cute & I feel badly for Nara as she's lost majority of function in her legs and in her hearing. It's nice to see, however, that she seems to have a friend in Sungjong. Maybe she can "tame" myungsoo's beastie self. I'm quite intrigued over Myungsoo's rather vehement protest that he does hate humans so soon after inquiring as to if he had hurt Nara. If he truly hated them, one would think he could care less about their thoughts- even if they were trying to avoid detection.

I feel so bad for those two. Being subjected to experiments and tests that cause such pain. I wonder if their immune systems were made low or lowered on purpose to ensure that there would barely be any chance of escape? I'm quite interested in Howon's idea and as to how they'll get free.

Also, I'm horrified over Sunggyu. I suppose I shouldn't be surprised as his treatment of his brother was bad but I really didn't expect him to have killed his own father just so he could be in charge.

I feel so badly for Myungsoo already. Aside from being hurt physically he also lost his mother- who I'm guessing is so far the only one to show him true affection- and I get the feeling Sunggyu never really accepted the fact that Myungsoo was officially part of the family which makes things even worse. I'm quite interested in seeing how he fares through the duration of the story!