I'm an Asshole, Baby. - Comments

I love their interactions! He's a dick, but she's right--he is fascinating. And he has now said that there will be a next time. Someone is getting interested against his will...

Oh...shit. I'm sure this is going to end well for her. Yeah, having to listen to Dawn probably would have been the lesser of two evils. Lol.

Love this completely. I think it's an amazing story. It has the perfect amount of amusing and seriousness. Update soon please!!

Haha! Bless Xavier's heart. He got screwed on this double-date. Not literally, of course.

I've had drunk friends that acted something like that. Lol. Sexy dancing, gorgeous eyes, a pretty intense moment...then she accidentally screwed it up. Grr! And he said she needs to loosen up. Maybe he should take his own advice!

I love Dave and Xavier! They're so great! And Will is adorable <3

Uh-oh! I can guess who the double-date is with! This should be fun.

I really enjoyed the update! It was nice to see Xavier's back story and what's going on in his family's lives. I can't wait to see when he crosses paths with her again, though. The only critique I can even give this is when you were talking about Xavier's friend. I guess you meant "closest" but it said "closets." It made me giggle. Not in a rude, making fun of your mistake way, but because I do it all the time. Heck I spelled out "house shoes" as "houses hoes"cause I was in a rush LOL.

Awe, I love him with his nephew!!!!!! I'm so glad you offered this insight, it adds so much to his character. Update soon!

Yay! I love this story. So glad you updared! He seems like such a tool but in a hot, please flirt with me sarcastically please Sir type of way. Can you just do me one favor though?

Update soon! Haha.

Lol. I had to love the exchange about her being a teacher. Obviously, the "you look like a teacher" was meant to be insulting. It made me laugh when Will asked what a porn star was and Xavier said "I'll tell you later." Bless him, he's like a gossiping kid.

I can't wait for the next update!

"Sounds like a porn-star."

Haha, I'm loving Xavier already. This could easily become one of my Mibba favorites.

This is for the comment swap!

Thoughts While Reading

Too nice?! No one can be too nice!
I am totally in the same boat as Samantha. I have a real soft spot for the elderly. They're just so cute.
Ah, kids can be quite mischievous and hard to handle. No wonder
I am instantly wondering who this character that Samantha ran into is. I hope it's a certain handsome someone. But only if it was in good circumstances!
Samantha is so right to yell at him! Cigarettes is one of my biggest pet peeves. I love how she just went for it and was in your face with him.
Hahaha, I love how they are joking about Santa Claus. They are both too sassy for their own good. It is already obvious that they are going to be quite the pair. Very interesting.
"I'm just an asshole, baby" Ugh I love that line! He is such a heart throb already and Samantha doesn't even know anything about him!

Ah, Samantha is back and dealing with the children again! Things are already getting crazy with those little ones. They are so sassy for being so small! Little kids and their arguments crack me up.

Writing

In chapter one, on the first line: "You're too nice," My friend and roommate, Dawn Hudson, 'My' doesn't need to be capitalized.

In chapter two, the first line sounds kind of strange. I made sure that the remainder of the week I was punctual in getting to work on time. I think it might sound better asL I made sure that for the remainder of the week I was punctual in getting to work on time.

In the next line in that chapter, there is a run-on sentence: Today I was watching over Ms. Harrison's classroom again, I had gotten an email informing me that she'd be out for a few more days because she was healing from a surgery. It should be separated like: Today I was watching over Ms. Harrison's classroom again. I had gotten an email informing me that she'd be out for a few more days because she was healing from a surgery.

Overall
This was a really fun story to read! I definitely think you should keep it! There are so many things you can do with these characters and I know there is an interesting back story with both of them that needs to be shared! This story is absolutely amazing and I definitely think you should keep writing it! I highly recommend this story!

I'm totally digging this!! Can't wait to see where this goes and can't wait for the next update :)

I'm totally digging this!! Can't wait to see where this goes and can't wait for the next update :)

This is amazing! The clash of the personalities is always a good read. I like that from the very beginning we can see that she's got the goood girl thing down but she can also joke around and laugh with her friends. Also, the dialogue seems effortless rather than forces which I'm happy for. Sometimes, writers tend to try and have cool dialogue in their stories and forget to see if it actually flows, I didn't get that feeling she I read yours. I really hope you keep this, it looks like its going to be great (:

This is amazing! The clash of the personalities is always a good read. I like that from the very beginning we can see that she's got the goood girl thing down but she can also joke around and laugh with her friends. Also, the dialogue seems effortless rather than forces which I'm happy for. Sometimes, writers tend to try and have cool dialogue in their stories and forget to see if it actually flows, I didn't get that feeling she I read yours. I really hope you keep this, it looks like its going to be great (:

Keep man!

That entire Santa Claus dialogue was gold, I gotta say. I'm interested in this asshole -.-
Who are you asshole? & What do you want?

It has my interest already. I'd say it's a keeper!

Keep!!! Definetly !! Love it so far

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Definitely keep! I'm loving this so far. It's already got me pulled in. I want to know what happens and why she gets to see Mr. Asshole, baby again!

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Definitely keep! I'm loving this so far. It's already got me pulled in. I want to know what happens and why she gets to see Mr. Asshole, baby again!