Underestimate Me - Comments

@ sassenach.
Coming from you this means a Hell of a lot to me. We will keep updating frequently. I'll try to give you another chapter in the weekend or so.

Yes, a new chapter. Even in my hectic schedule, I still have time to read this. You should know that this is very important, as I cannot focus on any of the books laying around my house. Excited to see what will happen next!

Happy Mibbaween! Here's comment 2/2!

For some reason I've felt as though I've already read this and commented, but I haven't so here we go.

I've only read chapter one since I'm a bit scrunched on time but what I've read so far is amazing. I'm not sure which of you had written this chapter or if it was combined but the writing was amazing. I noticed no grammar/spelling errors but to be honest I wasn't really looking for any, instead my mind was focused on visualizing every little detail you gave us. I could see the forest that you described so beautifully and that lake, god I would love to visit that stunning lake.

I won't have the time to read more of this today but I have to say that I love this so far. Excellent job you guys!

Good thing he's both powerful and easy :) @ Alex Moore.

@ Nikki Richardson
Oh poor Falcon haha we totally neglected him...

@ floral and fading.
Thank you for reading! I hope you come back and leave more awesome comments like this.

Also, as a sidenote, Leanne, I think we forgot Falcon. We're going to have to go write him back into Deliver Me and Conquer Me.

Summary: Really, really interesting. I want to know more about the rebels and why they’re rebels in the first place, and why they’re attacking.

Chapter 1: I love the descriptions. I’m really interested to know who this woman is, but she seems to know the way of the forest and that’s impressive, she’s obviously very clever. And also, I wanna be friends with a falcon! Damn.

Overall, really nicely written with fantastic descriptions and a layer of mystery to the character, which made the chapter even more enjoyable to read.

@ chelseycate
You are the best, and way to kind. That twist was one of my favorite things to write, and it complete broke my heart. I remember almost crying for Rowen a few times because of this chapter. Wait until you see what's coming next.

Holy hell guys! You spring a chapter like this on us??? I'm speechless at what just happened. Not speechless enough for a good comment, though, lol. The fight scene was intense and the sisters are such a strong group. I think this is a blow, though, there are injuries. Joss is such a fighter. You captured that well her collected and calm demeanor during it all. She's a force to be reckoned with, that is for sure. The men are ruthless, but so are the women. I felt bad for Rowen having to watch the slaughter of the men but yet I know it's essential for the survival of the women.

Oh my heart! Rowen! I didn't see that twist coming! He loved this women so much he'd kill one of his men for her?? I need to know what Josselyn thinks of this and how she will react. Such a good chapter, you guys!!

Favorite line is, "Men are not the only creatures who can play foul."

@ chelseycate
I've told you already; but you are so sweet! I hope I can update soon again ;)

Your ability to write scenery and descriptions just always takes me away! I'm sitting in my air conditioned room and yet the writing of the awful and unbearable heat was so real.

Meredith being all flirty and spunky, I like it! I wonder if the illusions to blood in this chapter -- the sun's casting color -- is foreshadowing anything in coming chapters! Just a thought!

Okay so I was just getting calm that the forest was going to be clear and they were safe. Then you spring that ending on me?? Ugh I need the next chapter! Lol. Great as always!! I do fear for the women though! I have faith in them though. Maa is a powerful goddess!

My favorite line is, "The heat was a sixth traveler, walking beside them and spoiling their already unwanted journey."

@ chelseycate
Damn girl, you have the art of commenting down. You make me blush everytime you comment and I love that you tell us your favorite lines!! More is still to come!

Chapter 55

I really love the increasing flashback scenes! I couldn't help but notice a parole between the past and now. Maa had whispered to Joss to keep her path, just as Kolby had told her when she gazed upon Rowen. That was a really wonderful connection. If she had key her path then, she couldn't be here now.

Anyway! Emma is getting a little too comfortable. Joss does see that she isn't Rebecca. I really loved the line, "She had braided herself into her former life, trying to connect to Rebecca in a strange way."

But by far, my favorite part was, "He was not hurting her, not with his hands or his weaponry. Though he was armed. He had their past as the finest weapon, its edge not dulled but sharp to the touch."

That's just amazing. He has so much hurt to cause her yet he's her prisoner. It shows that sometimes the worst wounds aren't on the outside. Great chapter!! And yes, I do love Kolby!

Chapter 56

Ahh!! I loved this chapter so much! The beginning made me nervous. I was afraid the trackers were gonna be getting close. But you gave us just enough of a glance into that to leave us curious lol

Again, the flashbacks are great. I love the teasing between Kolby and Rowen. It was clear it was more than just lust, though. I loved the distinction between Maa and Balor. Balor has left Rowen, really, and he's clearly not in good shape. Maa seems, to me, to be the more powerful god. I loved Meredith's claim that a woman's love is more pure. I take that in regards to Maa and in regards to Meredith and Joss.

"Josselyn, the cruel Goddess before him, still held his heart in the palm of her hand, but she hated the toy he’d given her so long ago." This line right here is one of my favorites and has me all tore up!! I can't wait until the next update.

@ sassenach.
Thanks so much, it means the world to me!

On chapter 17 now and my god, this is amazingly written. Very well build. <3

@ Carpe Diem !
I hope to read more about your thoughts concerning the story and I can't take credit for the layout I'm afraid

Be sure to come back and let us know what you think. @ Carpe Diem !
New readers are always so excited, and I love it, but I live by what you guys think after you dive into Joss and Rowen's lives,

So I'm coming here from my rec me stories blog and it's going to take me a while to get through this but I AM SO EXCITED AND I WANTED TO LET YOU KNOW I'M READY TO EMBRACE THIS STORY FULL ON.

This latest is absolutely bad ass, especially that banner. Bless. Okay, now I'm going to subscribe and read.

@ Average Lifesaver;;
Thanks for commenting! Both Leanne and I are a bit terrible with dialogue tags. We do try to fix them as we go long, so that's for pointing that one out. I'm looking forward to seeing what you think when/if you read more of the story.

The start of the first chapter sets the scene really well. You describe our nameless protagonist's actions and setting effortlessly.

“You little scoundrel,” [she] said with a smile on her face. “Already gone hunting for some flesh?”
>> Dialogue tags (she said, etc), are always lowercase. I can see that you do it correctly a paragraph down, so I'm sure this is just a typo!

His scarp claws >> I think you mean sharp?

Ch 2 -

I like the set up of this second character. Again, the descriptions and setting are really well defined but aren't over the top.

I'm interested in seeing how the two plot lines converge.

Ch 3 -

I'm all for Amazon-esque women. This is a cool civilization and you do a nice job of setting up how they came together like a group of vengeful lost girls.

I like that the plot is moving quickly so far - the characters are being established as the story goes, rather than pouring out some exposition and then amping up the plot. So far the pacing is good and I'm, again, curious what will happen when these two sides meet.

Right now, the characters are still in their early stages but I can see a lot of trajectory for growth and evolution for both Joss and Rowen.

Anyway, you two have set up an interesting story and I'm anticipating the battle and am curious to see where the rest of this story will take me. Nice job so far - looking forward to reading more!