It seems like it's been ages since I've read a decent fan fiction on Mibba but your story has a really good plot that sounds like thought actually went into it and I just love it! Can't wait for the next update!
I’ve gotten interested in your story by your simple title; my opinion is that you have a rough start in the whole story. It seems like your story line is not synchronized with the plot, your way of writing is in like a hurry. But, you have an amazing plot, storyline that I enjoyed reading and I will wait for more. Keep up the work and congratulations. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ This has nothing to do with your story. I just want to ask if you have time to try my story, if not this wouldn’t change my way of seeing your story and I will wait for more chapters. Thank you!