Look Straight At Me - Comments

DId you redo this?
Its REALLY good.
More soon?
<3

PLEASE UPDATE IM DYING HERE!!!!

lol, sorry, i just loove your story, its so amazing.

Daz xxx

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I noticed a few not-so-great comments, and I decided that this story really needs to be done justice.

Okay, so, um, can I say, it was FUCKING INCREDIBLE.
The whole story was really really raw, like, cut back to the bone raw, and I think you even mention bones, yes, the bones in his finger tips wrapping around your neck until you choke on muscle. Something along those lines. Well, yes, it was extremely raw.

...red fireworks bleeding behind your eyelids - SHIT. I don't think I have ever seen anything described quite like this. The whole story is SO intense, I was sitting on the edge of my seat the whole time. It was crazy. Crazy intense. Crazy intense raw.

You can fucking taste it, can’t you? - the language really works well in the story. Rather than just "you can taste it?" adding "fucking" makes it so much more fierce and almost angry. Yes, I could fucking taste it. It's almost arousing, the way you describe it all.

Two hundred abandoned boys aching for something more than they were giving us. - I really liked this line. It just seemed to fit well, and flow well with the story. It has a really hollow empty feel, and just delivered the idea well.

I think I have sufficiently destroyed your story now.
Keep it up (:

"God, that boy was gorgeous" - GOD, THAT STORY WAS GORGEOUS!!!
Wow, that was amazing. I'm definately subscribing :D

You've done it again.
Amazing work.


“What’s wrong, Francis? Sex make you uncomfortable?”

The other boys snickered; I tried to remember to breathe.

Something about that just made me shudder.
I love it.

I also love how you created Gerard's charater by only using one chapter. It was amazing.

Sorry for the shitty comment, but I wanted to leave something.
(:

Update soon?

(Oh, and remove the chapter you have for your authors note.)
lol.

^OOOOOLIVES, baby.
You caught the olive part?? You totally know what scene that's a reference to. :]
But shh, it's a secret.

God, woman! No, really.. You're a God; the female variant.

Those two chapters killed me. The first one, especially. Holy shit, what was that?

It was so amazing... I'm really looking forward to reading the rest.

(olives)

ily.

THANK YOU GUYS. :]

gah i love catholic school stories!
more please!

YAY - another story!
absolutely loved Crash Into My Fucking Arms and Kissing Spent Cigarettes
*subscribes*
please write more when the fucking writer's block has gone ^_^
xXx

Woah. It's amazing!
Love it!
Update soon!

Already read it again, I love it so far. &#9829;

i love it! tis' really good darliiing.
more soon please xx

Your writing never ceases to amaze me.

Amazing story. Is it finished or is it going to continue?
I love the way you organize words. No matter what the story was, I think I'd still like it, just because of that.

Eeeeeeeee.
I love you guys. :]

goddamnit.
i waaant the introduction
TO KEEP
XD
yes. i like it a lot. like all the rest of your writing. it would make life SO much easier if you could just subscribe to an author rather than each individual goddamn story.

Dammit. x]
I'm subrscribed to YET another one of your stories.

I don't have the time to drop a pretty litte comment
you deserve, so you'll have to settle with my spazzing.
I LOVE THE IDEA.
And the quote.
Love it to no end.

Dammit.
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Two updates and already two pages. I'm impressed :P
I loved it, as usual, but of course I feel like an ass compared to your writing ^_^ And thanks for the linkage <3 I am subscribing. Hopefully this one won't make me as emotionally traumatized as Headlights. >_>