Wildflowers - Comments

@ RFarley1991
lol I was thinking the same thing when I clicked on this

I almost freaked out when I opened this story and saw there were only a handful of chapters and the character names were different. Then I realized that I am following two stories with the same title....and ironically they are both about a teacher student romance.
But in saying that, I cannot wait to see how this one unfolds!!

Hey! Your summary is really what drew me into this. I've seen the concept before, but I'm always up for another one. Your writing is really good, but I did notice a weird tense thing that happens through out a lot of it. You switch to passive voice a lot ("they have been..." instead of "they are").

Also, I like the tone of your story, but be careful that it doesn't get too "uppity." I know Selina is supposed to be kind of stuck up and that transformation will happen through out the story, but even Gabriel talks that way sometimes. There's a few examples, but here's one that threw me: "“Oh, now, don't be so childish about it." (chapter 3). It's the "oh, now," It just feels like something an old lady would say rather than a young, attractive guy/teacher. Especially one who's being accused of molesting a student.

I think if you differentiate more between how Gabriel and Selina talk, it'll really give the characters their own feel/identity and keep the story from seeming too "uppity."

I hope that makes sense!

I got so excited when I got an email that this story had been updated! I think I was on here in minutes...even though I hadn't been on in forever!

I really hope that you keep updating this story (or at least sent it to me??? pleeeeease?) because I just love it so damn much. I love that there has already been so much character development! And even though I'm now in my fourth year of University, and highschool was so long ago, the story still seems mature to me. And like Selina's problems are real problems. Not just melodrama.

Much love!
AJ

Ahhh! I'm so happy you're reposting this! Especailly, because I can only remember one or two chapters ahead of this, and I really need to know what happens! Please hurry :)

im loving this so far!

Just going to say I'm so happy about this update. I saw and clicked it in like .3857272 second. This is just so well written and amazing and I'm so happy to be reading it. I want to read more so bad and can't wait until you update again.
I will be updating this comment once I'm home with a more criticy review.

a brand new update!! can't wait to know what you have in store for this story hehe

missed this story! can't wait for more!

I love this so far! Your writing is amazing. :)

I need this and you back in my life :(

i so agree with aubree james! this story is sooo enjoyable. i love the fact that you have two sort of forbidden love stories going, but both are so completely different from each other. it's amazing how you've managed that.

i really love Selina. she seems like such a complex character, with a lot of different layers to her. i can't wait to see more of her, and more interactions with Gabriel!

i so agree with aubree james! this story is sooo enjoyable. i love the fact that you have two sort of forbidden love stories going, but both are so completely different from each other. it's amazing how you've managed that.

i really love Selina. she seems like such a complex character, with a lot of different layers to her. i can't wait to see more of her, and more interactions with Gabriel!

I freaking love this story. So I read this chapter about three times. Firstly I love that you skipped over that whole party scene. It really wouldn't add anything to the story to write it out. I am pretty interested to see where this rumour takes your forbidden couple ;) also am I sensing a Gossip Girl reference with Blair and Selina?

really glad you updated

Unfortunately, I only read the first three chapters because that's all I had time for so I didn't get to know what happened in the other two chapters. But oh wow. You captured the head cheerleader attitude so perfectly. It's a little bit of an attitude toward other people mixed with hard work (and a small amount of wanting to scare the other girls on the team). Her attitude towards things is really amazing. She seems like the kind of person to do something until she gets what she wants without going too far, if that makes any sense.

I find it funny the way Selina and the guy first ran into each other, and her attitude toward him when she found out that he was actually a teacher and not a student like she thought he was. I don't know why, but when she realized that he was her teacher, it just made me laugh. It's almost as if I could see her pouting in class as he was going over what he was talking about.

And then the fact that the two keep running into each other, and never in a good way, especially for Selina. I feel like, after reading the first three chapters, she is so sick of him. Maybe she totally wants to slap him in the face for interferring with her life so much in just one day? Probably. I'm 100% sure at this point. Do I hope she does? Of course I do.

But ohhh. I can tell something is going to go on with the two of them in the future. I mean, they are main characters after all. I guess we'll see!

Uh, excuse me, but I need a forbidden romance in my life. Update this masterpiece.

K thanks bye

Oh, gosh, hi. I just found this and I'm in love with it.

Please update super freaking soon. <3

Did you you change the layout? It looks more beautiful than before! I love love love the character development that is coming in on this latest update! Selina is becoming a real girl, not just an overly determined cheerleader. And the sexual tension is building! So exciting. :) And what a cliche moment of her falling and him catching her.

Also, I like the bit of irony of her saying 'get a grip' to herself in the bathroom after she fell. I'm not sure if it was on purpose, but it was still funny! And then she makes the change! #foreshadowing

Ah! Can't wait for more. And I love seeing Selina's true nature, not the front she puts up. So please update soon!!!