I actually love that you included the case in the summary. That is one great way to make your readers stay! Sidebar: EMPLOYEES HAD GONE OFF THE MAP???? What is this great plot I’m smelling??! And they were harvesting human organs O M G what will this story hold???! And that romance factor is there so omg horraaaaay Love that this will focus on Asian characters because I tend to see (and write, myself) about characters who are American. I can already see this will be great.
Now onto the chapters: I really like the touch of adding the assignments and comments in the beginning of each chapter. It creates a great transition from the previous chapter and any upcoming chapters. Suzuha ahhhh. I already admire his character and his daughter. Speaking of his daughter, this line from her for an assignment was hilarious, “She's far too petite for her own good. I can snap her neck without even trying. She wears colorful, frilly clothes and I think I had a seizure because of it once, not sure though.” It's suppose to be serious but I just laughed at it harder than I thought haha! Lucifer is such a badass.
With her conversation with Yeju, I thought Lucifer is a badass, strong minded and just in control. I seriously admire the way you wrote her~ the way she takes anything into her hands and just own up to it. She's powerful, and I love that because many stories don't credit a strong female lead.
You just know how to make your characters pop. I really appreciate the background information you always add in your stories. I can’t help but notice how seamless you do always do it. And your descriptions, my goodness. I especially liked “Her face was carved by God himself. Dangerous cheekbones, a sharp jawline, baby blue eyes wide in its natural state.” I MEAN, CAN YOU WRITE ANYTHING WITHOUT MAKING ME MELT.
And Yeju’s wise words to her at 3 AM. O M G
Am so so so curios about Yeju and why she needs Lucifer’s protection. I truly enjoy her character, though. I love the way she says things. And she's not afraid of just speaking her thoughts to Lucifer. She's sort of like a badass herself!
ART OF KILLING I love this a lot This small phrase summarizes Lucifer’s personality perfectly. This is so interesting. I seriously liked how you wrote that she was commanded (from high authority) to kill.
“I have no sense of humanity when it comes down to killing people. I have no regret and I think nothing of it.” SHIT SHIT SHIT WOW WOW WOW Her feelings are so so wicked and pure filth and my god, she's so evil but I still like her hahahaha
WAIT WAIT WAAAAAIT WHAT THE HELL Who shot Lucifer????!!! ...wait lol. WHAT THE HELL, NIKKI?!u can't play me like that lol.
I envy the way you effortlessly write transitions! I noticed how smooth you write one scene and the next.
AWWWW LUCIFER IS FEELING HOMESICK AWWWW she's so precious
“Yeju just wanted someone to love her.”AWWW
UGGGHH WHAT THE HELL BRENT why u do this NOOOOOOO MS. KIM AHHHHHH I'm mad
Excellent job on your entry, Nikki! I hate that you left me at a cliff hanger now that Ms. Kim has an issue. I'll be waiting for the next one Sorry this comment came out so late. I had so many entries to read haha.
Now onto the chapters:
I really like the touch of adding the assignments and comments in the beginning of each chapter. It creates a great transition from the previous chapter and any upcoming chapters. Suzuha ahhhh. I already admire his character and his daughter. Speaking of his daughter, this line from her for an assignment was hilarious, “She's far too petite for her own good. I can snap her neck without even trying. She wears colorful, frilly clothes and I think I had a seizure because of it once, not sure though.” It's suppose to be serious but I just laughed at it harder than I thought haha! Lucifer is such a badass.
With her conversation with Yeju, I thought Lucifer is a badass, strong minded and just in control. I seriously admire the way you wrote her~ the way she takes anything into her hands and just own up to it. She's powerful, and I love that because many stories don't credit a strong female lead.
You just know how to make your characters pop. I really appreciate the background information you always add in your stories. I can’t help but notice how seamless you do always do it. And your descriptions, my goodness. I especially liked “Her face was carved by God himself. Dangerous cheekbones, a sharp jawline, baby blue eyes wide in its natural state.” I MEAN, CAN YOU WRITE ANYTHING WITHOUT MAKING ME MELT.
And Yeju’s wise words to her at 3 AM. O M G
Am so so so curios about Yeju and why she needs Lucifer’s protection. I truly enjoy her character, though. I love the way she says things. And she's not afraid of just speaking her thoughts to Lucifer. She's sort of like a badass herself!
ART OF KILLING
I love this a lot
This small phrase summarizes Lucifer’s personality perfectly.
This is so interesting. I seriously liked how you wrote that she was commanded (from high authority) to kill.
“I have no sense of humanity when it comes down to killing people. I have no regret and I think nothing of it.” SHIT SHIT SHIT WOW WOW WOW
Her feelings are so so wicked and pure filth and my god, she's so evil
but I still like her hahahaha
WAIT WAIT
WAAAAAIT
WHAT THE HELL
Who shot Lucifer????!!!
...wait lol.
WHAT THE HELL, NIKKI?!u can't play me like that lol.
I envy the way you effortlessly write transitions! I noticed how smooth you write one scene and the next.
AWWWW LUCIFER IS FEELING HOMESICK AWWWW she's so precious
“Yeju just wanted someone to love her.”AWWW
UGGGHH WHAT THE HELL BRENT
why u do this
NOOOOOOO MS. KIM AHHHHHH
I'm mad
Excellent job on your entry, Nikki! I hate that you left me at a cliff hanger now that Ms. Kim has an issue. I'll be waiting for the next one