When Winter Burns - Comments

I LOVE THIS

Cute eyes and shoulders of a god, but he must die because he attacked her and destroyed her bike Now that is some good reasoning

I like how she's focusing on Bucky's eyes instead of her pain and the bullet wounds. It's nice to get a glimpse into her thoughts as well as seeing more of her powers - I mean, she's coping with a bullet right next to her spine... No doubt she'll heal quickly though and encounter Bucky again, which I imagine will be very interesting considering what they have both been thinking about each other. Please update soon!

Yessssssss

I'm so glad you've updated.
I love you and this.
Said friend is funny.

I missed this story (and you)!

I can't believe they wiped him again! I always hated that part of the movie D: That means, if he encounters her again (which I'm sure he will) he will have to learn her techniques all over again

I thought it was adorable that he didn't understand the terms "baby" and "date" oh my lord, this man! I also liked the three words he thought, especially that the third word was a complete contradiction to the other two

Well, at least his handler is somewhat thinking of him...

Looking forward to the next chapter! :D

An update!! Yaaaaaaaas.

Oh my oh my oh my. This is intriguing and interesting. I love the way you've written this (I love the way you write everything, but that's beside the point) it's just so picturesque. I can clearly see Bucky there, all stoic and quiet as his c*nt of a boss interrogates him. Ugh. I don't like Pierce. He is suspicious to me and it seems like he has a hidden agenda.

I love getting an insight into Bucky's mind! I find it interesting how he thinks. It's all simple and I put that down to the bloody mindwashing shit. Poor guy. Though, I'm looking forward to how much he remembers afterwards!

Can't wait to read what you put up next!!!

I was seriously so happy to see that this had been updated (and that you had done a bunch of other stuff on Mibba too, but let's face it, I was totally keen for some more of this awesome Bucky story )

The first thing that really stands out to me about this chapter is the way you had him think three words after the questions. I thought that was really cool and a good way to look into his mind, especially the third word he'd think of.

It was really easy to picture this scene because of the similar one we saw in the movie, and it was cute how Bucky was trying to figure out what baby meant, and date. It makes me wonder exactly how much damage is done to him though when they're brainwashing and programming him, poor thing. I do wonder why he didn't tell them about her defining features though - is he only trying to help himself, or is a part of him trying to help her and possibly protect her from Hydra? And why does he have a sense of this?

Sad to see him being wiped, I always hate thinking about that I'm really interested to know how much of her and their encounters he's going to remember, if any. I can't wait to find out what happens next! And please make the next update come sooner than this last one

This is like foreplay.Very violent foreplay, but still, foreplay

I feel kinda bad for him, though, it's like he's he's thwarted by her at every turn. Yeah, he got the small victory of hitting her with his gun, but she still has the discs. It's another mission he's failed, which I'm sure his handler will be pissed about.

Looking forward to more! :D

Hot damn, this is awesome.

And Bucky just got his ass whipped. Twice! Hahaha! I love it!

Wow, I really couldn't tear my eyes away from that chapter, it was just so intense and I couldn't tell who was going to come out on top! I feel really bad for Bucky, and I don't know what he's going to do about yet another failed mission. But no doubt you're going to make it an interesting read for us!

The only piece of critique I can offer is the part when she says "can't stay and dance" etc, because I feel like Bucky wouldn't have let her talk for so long, he would have attacked again. The dialogue above, when she calls him sugar, I think is fine because he's sizing her up and readying himself for an attack, but I feel like during her second speech he should have jumped her again to maintain his advantage. If that makes any sense at all I just felt like it interrupted the flow and the tension a bit.

Yeah! So deliciously good! I kind of want to go back and reread that last chapter because I can't get enough of it. At least Bucky got to get some hits on her this time and wasn't left totally embarrassed even if she did get away and managed to beat him. I imagine their next meeting will be a little more violent. He's just gonna get angrier and angrier until he's able to best her. I'm also not expecting his handler to be pleased at all either when he hears the news. :/ Yikes. Awesome update!

Such a violent first date.
Because I know they won't be having those regularly.
Amazing update bub!

ooh, ouch!! well they met... and that really didn't end that well.. but it was really entertaining to read

I bet Bucky stuck out like a sore thumb in a place like that XD

I really like how the handler just carries on eating and makes Bucky stew in his silence.

I'm really excited to see what happens next, whether he will be successful in this new mission. I hope his determination to stop the girl doesn't consume him.

More please! :D

He better not fail or that girl is gonna mock him so bad.
Just saying.

He better not fail or that girl is gonna mock him so bad.
Just saying.

YOU UPDATED!!!!!!!

Can I just say that the image of TWS sitting at a posh French cafe is just hilarious because he does not fit in that scene one bit

Such a small thing but I think you meant 'exit' at the end of this sentence? "He stood, made to leave again but stopped at the hand that shot out to pause his exist."

I'm really eager to see how this plays out. I feel like his determination to not fail is going to end up backfiring on him and he's going to slip up, either during his next mission or when he runs into her again, which I'm guessing is probably going to happen at the same time. I get the feeling it's making him reckless when he needs to be more focused.

As always, a great chapter, really cool to see the relationship between him and his handler play out some more, and find out more about Bucky's new situation. I hope Mibba will let you update this on time!

Mutant? That totally makes sense! Holy balls. I love this.

His handler seems cool, I hope. His dialogue's hilarious but also hard hitting. I say this every time but I really love the shorter chapters.

You're posting again? Sweet! I didn't realize just how much I missed your writing style until I read this. You have one of the best styles in my opinion. It's a little weird to see such short chapters from you considering your other work, but this works just as well. Might even make me anticipate the next chapter ever more.

It's probably better for me that this story disregards The Winter Soldier since I'm not exactly caught up on my Marvel movies. Not that I wouldn't not read this even if it did, but I won't feel like I'm missing something this way. Everything's so intriguing though. I did feel my heart kind of wrench for him in the last two chapters though, thinking about what would happen to him once he reports back his failure. Poor guy. The chair really makes me feel bad.

I also like this girl, the White Tiger. I like her attitude. The note was great, and I'm loving that she's so easily outsmarting him. I'm also highly amused by the fact that he seems to think that her being a mutant is the only explanation as to how she could have bested him. I'll be even more amused if that mutant rumor turns out to be false. I'm wondering how long he'll chase her before he catches her or how that situation will go down.

Can't wait to read more of this. I love it! 10/10

This new style of writing short chapters seems to be agreeing with you, they have just enough to leave us on the edge of our seats and wanting more! I like it! :D

drove several noses into overworked brains. I love that line, the way you write, gah! You could have just said he punched them in the nose, you make it sound like poetry! I love eeeet!

fists the size of small hams I'm picturing a guy with hams for hands

Of course, things couldn't go smoothly for him, that would be too easy! I'm guessing it was the fact that he failed his mission that's gotten him so angry, doesn't matter who they are. The fact that it's a girl just adds insult to injury. I do love that he got outsmarted by a girl, though

What chair would they put him in? That sounds ominous! If they know he's failed the mission, they would wipe his memory so that he couldn't relay the information to anyone else? It's a good security measure, if nothing else.

Gah, I love the last few sentences of chapter three, had me clicking the link for chapter four repeatedly until it loaded! XD

So..she's a mutant? Now I'm thinking all sorts! Supernatural experiments! Underground laboratories! Secret governments!

Of course the note would be in the shape of a cat Hahahaha, I love how she's taunting him!

I would not want to be in her shoes when he finally catches up with her, he is pissed!

Very much looking forward to more! :D

Layout and Summary

The layout looks awesome! I love the photo at the top (what a beautiful man ) and the colours are all awesome. The only thing I'd say is an issue is the links -- they kind of fade into the background and it was difficult to see the chapter titles when clicking on them.

The summary does the job of keeping the reader interested in what they're about to read, so good job on that!

Content

I'm a huge fan of Bucky Barnes in the Marvel 'verse anyway, so I was really happy to see that this centred around him! I love the start, it kind of merges personality with the job that he has to do, which is cool. I think the length of the sentences works well in the first chapter as well -- short and tense, just like you can imagine the hunt being. The last sentence in the first chapter really fits in well as well, it closes the start off perfectly.

I love this mysterious chip that he's chasing! I'm really interested as to exactly what it does, because it has all of this security and people chasing it. I also think it's really hilarious that Bucky is being bested by a girl. That amuses me more than I can admit.

Overall

I have no concrit, this is an awesome story! You're doing a wonderful job so far, keep it up!