Carolina, I Just Paint. - Comments

@ Alex Moore.
It wasn't anything big just my opinion if the main character, he seemed really focused on the sex and her breasts. Which didn't ruin the story or anything but when he talked about wanting to tell the guy he slept with her just to stick it to him again to me it seemed disrespectful to me that he'd even consider doing that without any thought for her feelings. However, I'm not sure if he stayed quiet out of respect for her or simply because he was somewhat of a coward. None of this ruined the story it was just an oppinion.

@ Michael Westen
As I said before; you are just magnificent. Thank you for the comment! Chelsey will look at your feedback and fix little errors you mentioned.

@ Divine Faery
Thank you! I do love making layouts and indeed I have somewhat of a signature. For the rest of the feedback, I do not quite understand what you are getting at. Could you specify what you mean, I'd love to do something with your feedback but I don't know what you mean at this stage.

@ LadyBatCat
We will! as long as we get such sweet comments!

Love the story! It's beautifully written and the descriptions are fantastic. I can't wait to read the next chapter. Keep it up.

Also the layout is very beautiful, all your layouts I've seen are kind of the same in a way, as in you seem to have a signature, but they all fit the stories perfectly.

Well the desciption is great, there are a few mistakes like when you say goddes instead of goddess or when you said sighted instead of sighed. I know he thought more of her but he seemed really focused in the sex and her breast, but putting the girls business out there just to get at the dude seems disrespectful to her. Of course he didn't but I think there's a better way to go about it.

However, back to the story I find it odd she'd just sleep with him, maybe there's more to it. I believe there is.

Good job, I'll be waiting to read the other half.

As always, your descriptions are flawless. I love the way the flashbacks are tied into the story. David's character is so well put together and Carolina is just so...devious. I love what you have here. And I really love all the dialogue. Especially the dialogue between David and Carolina.

You did have a small misstep with tense at the end of one of the paragraphs:
"I must have sprained some of them when…"

I didn't catch any other mistakes.

And because I know how hard you work on layouts, this one is absolutely gorgeous.

As for a favorite line...
I think it's a tie between Carolina answering David when he asks what she's doing to him and "They lay on the paintstained floor, covered in acryl, paintings of fornication."

I hope you update with the rest soon. I'll definitely read it and give you another comment. Fantastic job.