The Experiment Revolution - Comments

Double comments are evil. xD

I also want to comment that I like the variating lengths of the chapters.

This is very peculiar.The banner is a tiger (my favorite animal), but yet, the doctor had 0.4 living in a cage, and gives her a dog bone. That's definitely got me wondering.

And this is written so well, too! I love that its written thus far as a journal. The layout is simple, but enough to spark intrique, which it certainly did for me. Your descriptions are great as well. Like Michael Western pointed out, the doctor doesn't think much of her losing so many memories. I wonder why? And what is this Revolution? I can't wait to find out! I love original fictions like this, but most don't usually catch my attention so easily, but you have with this! I've reccomended this and I'm subscribed, and will most definitely be looking forward to updates!

I find it interesting that she can remember colors, and what the sun looks like, but she can't remember anything important.

It's crazy to me that the doctor is so nonchalant about how they removed way too many memories.

It's definitely an interesting concept. It's very matter-of-fact. I do like that the story is being told by her journal entries, that's neat.

I didn't find any mistakes, the only thing I'd like the comment on is a bit of a personal opinion thing so don't take it too personally.

I took a look at his hair instead. Brown (like poop) that's just such a bizarre way to describe a color, but that's just my opinion.

Good luck with the rest of it!