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  • MyVenusDoom

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    LOL if only Mibba would up their server support and resolve these painfully obnoxious issues.
    August 7th, 2015 at 05:59am
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    Ugh, double post. :)
    August 7th, 2015 at 05:46am
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    Aleksi's got game lol. Very cute first introduction. I take it we have our love interest? :D

    For critique, watch the past and present tense switch up. I catch myself doing it all the time, and I've noticed it a few times in this story. I know you'll work that out in the rewrite. It's tough in this format!
    Haha yesss, we have our love interest :)

    Thank you. I know I struggle with that a lot. I will do my best to not be doing that in the next part. :)
    August 7th, 2015 at 05:44am
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    Aleksi's got game lol. Very cute first introduction. I take it we have our love interest? :D

    For critique, watch the past and present tense switch up. I catch myself doing it all the time, and I've noticed it a few times in this story. I know you'll work that out in the rewrite. It's tough in this format!
    August 7th, 2015 at 04:32am
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