Sinners as Saints - Comments

That chapter was really good, the detail was awesome! More please

@ red harlot.
You're welcome! I also noticed the fast pacing, maybe also make the chapters a bit longer as well. Adding more little details could help too, describing things like what people look like, certain sounds, things like that. I don't really have much to criticize. Your spelling and grammar seems on point. I look forward to continue refine this c:

I've just read the first couple of chapters. I think you've got an interesting idea. I'm not usually one for urban fantasy, but I plan to stick with this one.

I did notice the fast pacing...I think you could definitely give us more "five senses" stuff, which would help the pacing quite a bit. Put us in downtown HB. Give us more of what the little guy looks like. Things like that.

But I do like what you have and am curious to see where this goes from here.

@ Lexi Wombat
Thanks for the feedback!

When I reread it, I kind of thought it was a little fast paced. I could probably add more detail as well. Do you have any sort of constructive criticism I could utilize in the future?

Also, thanks for reading!!

Really interesting concept, I'm definitely intrigued to see what you'll do with it!