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I.NEED.MORE

I.NEED.MORE

Okay, I saw everything. Same happened to me with the last chapter. The scene is so clear and the reactions and the movements. Stop being so talented please.

"There was just a thing. An almost thing. It didn’t last long enough to become a thing."

I think this could be the summary for Monster

Ok. this Graham kid, I like him, but I don't want to like him, because I don't trust him. I dont trust a lot of your characters (remember my worry about Clara?) I think I might be turning into Tony Stark. Damn it. But he's cool, like the kind of guy who would lie to the police or make a distraction to save your ass once a week. Yes, a week. Jo, Im surprised you manage to stay out of trouble for the summer.

“I think he loves you,” he said quietly.

Yeah, Graham is not that bad... hehehe

"Raccoon cut the power and I called a friend to come help me fix it. "

Dude, how is that Tony didn't freak out after this? YOU LET ANOTHER GUY TOUCH MY STUFF?

“Just butt out and let me make my own mistakes then. She’s my sister. Not my mother.”

I think you missed a Clara reference here...

Then I returned to my seat on the floor at his side. Only, this time, I reached out and wrapped my palm around his metal fingers before shutting my eyes.

This is the sweetest thing I've read all day. Probably all week.

Question! how long has it been since Monster? (story time)

Question! how long has it been since Monster? (story time)

“I’m pretty sure I won’t be able to hold him down. He’s like a fucking cyborg,”

HAHAHAH

Bucky yanking the metal piece on his own... RADICAL.

“I didn’t mean to bring this on you,” Bucky was muttering. “I didn’t know where else to go.”

Dude, you're dying. Stop apologizing to her.

“I’m fine. Never been better in my entire life.”

The sarcasm is strong in this one

His eyes opened again and he moved his hand up to slide the pad of his thumb over my cheekbone.

That looks like a goodbye. DONT YOU DARE SAY GOODBYE BUCKY. OPEN YOUR EYES, YOU HAVE ONE JOB.

Fiuu.
OK, here we go... First how could you?
Second HOW COULD YOU?!
I liked this chapter, action on the early stages, that's new and nice. We have some Bucky, weird funny sarcastic Bucky bleeding on the floor. The reactions of Graham are great, freaking out but trying not to show it completely. Jo, of course, Mama Cat ready to help the injured assasin. Move him first, ask if he is dangerous later. YOU COULD HAVE DIED, JO, DAMN IT!
And then we have this ending... WHY DO YOU HATE ME SO MUCH?! You're lucky I live in another fucking country, otherwise I would be kicking your door, demanding for the next piece... but... it's okay. Im excited... I'll wait.

you see? fangirling mode on.

I absolutely love that you brought Bucky in so early in this sequel! While I'm reading it, there are sometimes that I make myself confused because I'm thinking of the last version. But while reading this, it's so easy to tell that you're so much more proud about this work than the last one (although, I did LOVE the last version). It also brings a little baby tear in my eye that you've been updating every day. Only 55 days until Civil War, so this story just gets me more and more excited. Keep up the good writing and I'm happy you're loving what you're doing

I have an army
We have a Hulk
I have a bookshelf

I broke the "enter" key of my notebook... :(

“Who the hell is in my car?” I heard Tony say through the speaker. HAHAHAHA!!!

Like on a date?” he asked after a moment.

OMG this Tony... this Tony is what I need to start the day with a good smile.

ESPECIALLY considering the last guy you went out with put a bullet in your shoulder. And don’t even get me started on the one before that

He has a point.

I like it. A lot, but I dont trust this Graham kid, he's weird and Im with Tony in this one. That little sh*t could be HYDRA. Jo, you need to stop trying to help people, you're going to die because of that... and stop dating too.

I dont think I commented on the chapter 2: I like it. New Sam, great idea!!! Graham kid, I have my eyes on you... Both of them, because Im not Fury

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This is a beautiful first chapter. A really smooth way to start the sequel. I like the flashback, it makes sense to start this one with a memory just like Monster did. Im excited because it's already done, and because I know you had a great time writing it... uffff...

“I had that once. Or at least, I thought I did. It didn’t turn out so well.”

I love this quote, and the summary too... dude, I hear it in my mind with the same voice of the dude in the video I sent you days ago.

Im excited. And this is probably the most decent and calm comment you're going to get from me. From this point, we are going straight to Crazy Fangirl Town, were I am oficcially Mayor.

:D