How to Ditch Your Baggage - Comments

Keep updating! I liked the recent update. Still reading.

Im really enjoying this story. I really like how it's not your typical end of the world story. It's different & It's got a sense of humor. It took me like 5 years to finish reading the four chapters but I honestly can't wait to read more. I can't wait to see what Sloane has in store for Shay. But I have a feeling she isn't going to scare him off as easily as she thinks she is.

this is actually the funniest thing omg i just finished chapter 2 and ??? I AM DYING WITH LAUGHTER THIS IS EVERYTHING AND I LOVE IT AND SLOANE IS MY FAV LIKE the car stalling and her lists and I WANTED THEM 2 CVS' AGO and shay and sloane are everything this story is everything and i seriously hope you continue writing this because it gives me life and i love it!!! c:

I've just finished reading chapter one and I can already tell you that this story is going to rock. As Sloane would do, I am going to make a list of reasons that it rocks.

1. Sloane is hilarious, and how I would probably act if everyone in the whole world disappeared.
2. Your writing style is really good, and not something that I see a lot of times. It's really refreshing.
3. Sloane reminds me of Tallahassee from Zombieland, and he was one of my favorite characters from the movie- so this is awesome.
4. Lists rock, and so does this story.

Layout + Summary
I adore your layout! The banner is funny and it seems really fitting to the story as well. The summary is funny as well, and it really shows what the story is going to contain. I'm super excited to read it and see what it's all about!

Chapter One
I love how you started this. Sloane is so involved with the reader and that's something I don't see a lot of in stories. I think you really captured a sassy attitude with a character that's obviously flawed, but in a humorous way.

Maybe I’m carrying sweet baby Jesus in my womb as we speak. I don't know why I laughed so hard at this, but I did. Shame on me.

You can think I’m an awful person, but since I’m the only person it’s make me the best person. -- I think you meant to put it makes me the best person.

I've never read an end-of-the-world story like this. I like how much the narrator doesn't care. She's the last person on Earth and damn, she's living life. Plus, the fact that she can't find the pop corners that she wanted was funny to me.

And the end. The fact that she isn't worried about the fact that there's another human being around, but pissed off at the fact that the guy stole her favorite snack. Brilliant.

I'm absolutely loving this right now! I'm really excited to see what more you do with it, so I'll definitely be reading on. The only mistake I saw was the one I pointed out above. Other than that, this was perfect. Great job and best of luck!