Girls Like Boys - Comments

Im so worried for Travis, don't break my heart, don't do it!

Well considering you actually didn't write what I told you not to, I think you did a really good job. Very high with tension, especially at the end. And now I'm really worried and I need to know what happens next BECAUSE HOLY CRAP THAT WAS INTENSE.

I wonder just how mad Ramsy is at Cody right now too. But I think it was cute how she wouldn't just let Travis be by himself after that. Too bad that didn't actually work out in her favor.

MADDI, don't break my heart with whatever comes next. I hope you're already working on the next chapter.

I AGREEEEEEE. you're dragging this out and it's KILLING me, smalls! I need moar. now hhahahah. I'm glad I could help<3 anytime you need it. I'm ready for some racing action! let's DO this. but I agree with Travis -- who cares what the other person thinks if you don't wanna race against them. you got a reputation for the best for a reason. I wouldn't wanna race against someone who couldn't drive for shit and that could kill me in the first place either.

Careless Boys
I feel like Ramsy is the more outgoing of the two. She seems like she's always ready and willing to talk to whoever. Cody definitely seems like she's the responsible one.
Ahh Travis! He really is quite intriguing.
Omg I can't stand the sound of people making out, it's truly disgusting.
And his humor! "Or y'know, you could thank me, since I’m the one who found it" A+
I really like how he knows the difference between the two of them too, like it's almost creepy because he really doesn't know them at all, but it's also a bit endearing that he's that interested.

Classes & Clashes
Okay okay just who is Travis? So many people seem to know him, he's well off enough to afford a super expensive car... I totally understand why Cody is so annoyed by him though. He totally is a stalker. If not that then he's just really good at being in the right place at the weird time.
And oh look he's honorable. Why can I picture him wrapped up in a bow sitting under a Christmas tree?

Around Here
I'm really enjoying the play by play between the two of them. Travis is such a relentless little shit and Cody is just doing the best she can to fight against him.
There relationship is already so fun. And frustrating (for Cody)
"I could imagine the wreckage Travis left behind when he moved on." this line man. Damn.
I feel like they just slipped into being more friends than her being annoyed with him, which honestly I wasn't expecting.
Travis is suchhh a pain. I love him.
WHERE DID HE GET THE CAR?!
I think you created an angel and I'm not okay with it. (I'm referring to Travis obvs)
Did she just miss class to hang out with him? Wow I feel like a mother and I'm not sure how to feel about that fact.
"“No, Cody, a real Greek God from Mt. Olympus,”
I love this story so much already.
Oh wait never mind to the question about skipping class.

Every Night
Ohh look at Ramsy being the responsible one.
Travis' sense of humor is definitely on the dry side. I love it.
Not much to say on this one.

Travis Laughlin
I REMEMBER THE NAME REIGN OHHHH
Ahaha I love Cody's sass.

Second Saturday
I had a feeling Tegan was going to find out. Oh well.
Why am I scared that something's going to happen between her and Jack and it's not going to be good?
I mean he is kind of sketchy though... If we're being honest. But it's only because of how mysterious he is.
Honestly I think the chapter is fine how it is, not awkward at all.

Admittances
It's probably 'cause I'm feeling defensive of Travis but I am NOT liking Jack.
Oh nooo. Oh no oh no. I'm not okay right now.
OH NO. I'm really not okay.
It makes me sad that he's such an asshole but like I've known this about him but arghhh.
AND NOOO I feel so bad for Cody. Her first kiss and it was complete shit? Oh man.
WHY DOES HE HAVE TO GO FROM BEING A COMPLETE JERK TO BEING A DAMN GENTLE GIANT THIS IS NOT FAIR.
Oh god. I can't even after this chapter. I just can't.

Twenty-one & Running
I know I need to write at least something about this chapter but I'm still in a little bit of shock. Like I honestly thought it was something to do with drugs, or maybe like the mob or something, but not this.
This is so good.
Part of me worries for Cody but honestly at the same time I can see there being some sort of turn around and Travis getting out of the illegal aspects of his life...
Now onto the next

Kingdoms
Why on Earth was Cody imaging a dump when clearly he's got enough money to have a nice car?
Honestly I'm surprised she's not freaking out as much.

November
Wait I'm so confused. Why is she hanging out with Jack? Where did this come from? AHhh
Oh okay never mind. For a second I was afraid something had happened that you weren't sharing yet and Cody and Travis had a falling out.
But I am curious as to how Ramsy reacted when she was informed of everything.
IF THESE BOYS CALL THE COPS IMA BE PISSED
NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NO NOOOOO they are not suppose to be the ones that are dating.
Oh wait we're good.

Baby, It's A Dreamland
If something happens to Travis I WILL NOT FORGIVE YOU
I'm really happy with how their relationship is progressing by the way.

Highway 11
Oh man. You really know how to drag it out.
I don't know what else to say other than I really am excited to be all caught up and wish I had kept up along with it sooner.

i love everything about this honestly like... how it started, what it went into. ugh love love love

Read up to chapter 5 and finally got to meet Travis! I like the pace this has and I'm really excited to read more of it but for now I need a break.

I like how different but similar Cody and Ramsy are. The dynamic between the two of them is really fun to read.

okay. so. I hadn't read any of your stories in a while, so after reading trouble-maker I was like "hm. lets see what else she's got" and let me effing tell YOU, ma'am... HOLY SHITBALLS. I haven't been this enraptured in a story in I don't know how long. I had planned on leaving a comment for every chapter but by the time I realized I hadn't left a comment, I was already done with what you've written so far. just... holy fuck, dude.

first of all -- even though they're identical twins, I love how they're a different dynamic about Ramsey and Cody but at the same time... they're still like the same person. I honestly thought it was weird how quickly Travis showed up and implemented himself into her life, but then I started really feeling it out and I like it. I mean -- it's hilarious. pushing all of her buttons just because he can? excellent. it's like he knew she would be weird. and I love how we're 18 chapters in and there's no real mention of a relationship between the two, even though you like just KNOW they're going to end up together, right? well. at least I hope they do.

don't get me wrong.. I understand why everyone is like "ooohhh stay away from him!" but at the same time, as someone who actually did grow up with street racing I'm just like "..they're racing cars. chill out." but I understand the dangers of being caught (trust me -- did my share of running when we thought there were going to be cops) and whatnot. anyway, I'm digressing. I love how Cody hasn't changed. I know some people when they go off to college they change a lot because they have a lot more freedom but she hasn't and she's still as stubborn as the first day she got on campus and it's great. not a huge fan of Jack -- he can fuck off -- but all the others I do like. although I think it would be cool if there was another girl involved (being the only girl in a group of guys who are focused on a car sucks balls). but anyway. I just... idk something about this race and how it's Cody's first race watching him has me extremely nervous. either something's going to go extremely bad and he's gonna end up in the hospital or in handcuffs -- or WORSE! lose his CAR ... or it's going to go extremely well and he wins and yadda yadda and idk. I just can't deal. I need more of this like freaking yesterday UGH. SO FREAKING GOOD. TEN OUT OF TEN WOULD RECOMMEND. I agree with merero that this deserves a lot more comments and recognition. I just freaking love this!

oh and this deserves waaaaaaaaay more readers/comments/subs by far!

okayyyyyyy i read all of this in one sitting and honestly the only thing i have to say is that i fucking LOVE this. wowowowow

I'm so sorry I haven't gotten to the next chapter until now! I should have gotten to it sooner! So sorry!

But I've read it and I'm ready to comment now! I love this second chapter, by the way. It was humorous and light-hearted and I don't know. I think it's because I've been reading and writing and watching so many things, it's nice to read a relaxing story about two girls heading off to college and just spending some time with their dad and brother before starting school. Simple and clean.

The humor is also nice. You've got me smiling and laughing a couple times with the incident with the tattoo-and-piercings-guy.

I can't wait to see what trouble that guy will cause!

Also, Cody's boldness and shamelessness is awesome! She's so cool; the way you write her character is so admirable!

I guess I'll end this comment with another apology for how sporadic and all over the place this comment is. But I adore this story and will be reading more (of course, it might take time with how busy I've become. So sorry again for taking so long to comment!)

Gees. These apologies are probably annoying you. I'll stop. Keep up the loving writing!

Okay so I'm three chapters in and I'll tell you my thoughts thus far!

In both this story and Trouble-Maker, you do a nice job balancing a lot of characters, especially in a family setting. There are a lot of names, but they all develop into themselves really nicely.

You have a good knack for detail too. Each scene is really finely described and it helps build the characters.

As a moment of crit -- the pacing is a hair slow. You have good exposition here and I like it, but I'm hoping that the pacing will pick up a tad. I totally understand that this may be a story about a life (or two lol), so it is built more on growth and interpersonal relationships that form. But I think cutting some of the moments - like the shopping scene - may not be a bad idea. That's your choice - and an editing decision to make - but I think it may help pacing.

Can't wait to read more. Nice job with this! The girls and their family have been interesting to read and I'm looking forward to see what happens their freshmen year.

Also something I noticed:

...his own room, leaving Ram and [me] to our morning routine.
...Wes park the cars in the closest lot and left Ram and [me] to ourselves. >> I do this all the time but a trick is to cut out the other person and read it like "and left me to myself." "...left I to myself" wouldn't make sense, so it's me not I.

Again, nice job!

*chapter one

I love the scene with Charlie and grandma, telling him to shut up and whatnot. Not sure if you meant to make it comical, but it made me amused! XD

I think the dialogue is amazing in this chapter because you did so well with bringing their personalities to light as well as what their relationships with one another is like.

If this story is intended to have such comical characters verses realistic, I like it a lot, but if not, I will say that Charlie seems a bit exaggerated and can't be taken too serious as a character (if you're going the realistic route, but hey, I actually like the comical exaggeration - makes the story fun!).

The way you write about Cody feeling nervous to leave really hits home with me. I really felt what she was feeling that moment driving off to college. You did great on that :)

Really, I do love grandma here. She is great in the first chapter so funny! Can't help but see my own grandma in her. You hit so close to home hahaha!

Overall, I like this first chapter - it was a great introduction to the story without being too detailed or giving out too much characterization and information at once. You threw us right into the action and I love it! I'm going to read the second chapter and leave a separate comment since I feel this one has gotten too long.

But great story so far :D I like it!

So I just saved all the chapters to my desktop and I'm gonna read them later and then I'll message you with my thoughts cause I wont' have good enough service to leave a comment.

So this is amazing. I love your writing style. Defiantly subbing, please continue with this :)

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I know a girl who looks and acts just like Cody, and she has the same name. Crazy.

I really really realllyyyy love this story. It's fun and playful to read. I can't wait for more updates!

I just love the tone of this. It's so easy to read. And now I want cake. I like tornado Charlie, he's funny to watch.

Since I've decided to now cast myself in all your stories, I'm their brother. i eat ALL the cake.

I like Ramsy. She's a spitfire.
OHHH Grandma Ester!

I'm still so excited super glad you've brought this back even though you have like a hundred other things that aren't even finished yet.

I'm so excited for you to bring this back