Sable - Comments

@ FullMoon2012
That's how I felt about the monster's first draft, fortunately nothing is set in stone :) much kudos to you, I rage delete when I dislike stuff even if people are enjoying it >.<

@ SoberKitty
Ohhhh, goodness. Rereading this story makes me cringe. XD Thanks for pointing out the typos! I went back through and fixed what I found.

Honestly not just the title caught me, but the end part of your description too. 'Thanks characters' is basically the story behind my story if that makes any sense. It always starts innocent, short and sweet, and then boom the characters got their own ideas and it's a spiral from there. XD but yeah I liked the first chapter, I'm weird I get stuck in description on my own writing but when it comes to others I need the plot to escalate quickly or I'm out.

There were a couple of typos but given that you stated you wanted to just finish it first I'm going to focus on the one I think you should always keep: 'where even was she?' It was so perfect I had to crack a smile, it perfectly summed up how confusing and disorienting the experience was and spoke to her humanity. A quick spell check would take care of the rest. :) so yes, happily subscribed. ^-^

For it just being a stress reliever this is a good story. I know what it's like to have moved out of your parents house and having to move back in. It's not fun at all. Hope you don't go crazy like I did. If you ever need someone to talk to or run an idea by send me a message :)

@ RFarley1991
Fixed it!

very interesting concept. I cannot wait to see where you go with it.
Just an FYI, chapter 5 is doubled.