August 29th, 2016 at 05:34pm
I usually only comment on the first chapter of these stories, even if I plan on continuing to read them, so that's what I'm doing here.
So far this is actually really good in my opinion, and I definitely plan on reading this. It catches the reader and makes them want to keep reading, however i do have to point out what I assume is a typo in the 5th paragraph of the 1st chapter where you wrote: and the babe inside her for dead . If this is a typo, you should probably change babe to baby, if not go ahead and keep it. I know as a writer myself, I can miss a lot of typos and I'm assuming that's what happened.
I wish you the best of luck in writing.
xxx Sam
That first chapter, wow. Quite a whirlwind introduction. Poor Hortense. I really love your writing style, and the way you keep the dialogue realistic. A lot of times I find that historical fiction on here is rife with too modernized ways of speaking bur you're doing a great job with this.
I can already tell I'm going to like Emmeline; she's a fiesty one. I hope you continue with this because I see tremendous potential for this story.