When the Savior Is Damned - Comments

very sweet and you made me realise.........
thats exactly what i'm gonna be like when i meet them
please not i say WHEN not if but WHEN
lol
THis was really sweet"sniff"

I liked it. It was sweet, and descriptive. The bond between the two brothers was bittersweet, because of the awkward promise. I thought it was pretty good^^

This is absolutely beautiful. I have a terribly short attention span, and am unable to read through anything badly written, but this kept my attention and left me wanting more after each chapter. Okay, so I wasn't too astounded after the first chapter, but I could see that you have *something* special (although I couldn't pinpoint exactly what), so decided to keep reading on. I'm so very glad I did.

Well... I liked it but I just found it to be a bit unrealistic. I mean, who randonly brings up suicide and pill-popping after an awesome show? I think that the timing was off and I found it unreasonable. I also found the dialogue to be stiff. The words didn't really flow with what someone would really say. But all in all it was okay. Nothing too special really stuck out to me. But then again this view is based solely on reading one chapter. I see potential but I just don't think you're quite there yet. But you're well on your way. I may keep an eye on you to see how you progress.

Oh, thank you. I've stumbled upon waaay too many Waycest fanfics. I'm pretty much traumatised.

Yeah, I worry a lot. Boo.

Bastard Son... That was one of the best comments I've ever gotten.:D You seriously rock, and I can't say it enough.

Spaztastic comes in second...

Thank you guys.:)

The last two chapter I read were amazing. I read the whole thing now. And those last two chapters really stuck with me. Especially the last one. That last one was just so... like Mikey would think - overwhelming. That last paragraph of the last chapter almost brought tears to my eyes - the way Gerard simplified his reasons for raising a hand against himself and how Mikey mentioned the promise he gave their grandma. The moment where you described how their lips almost touched when they spoke and how he could only see the glimmer of his brother's eyes was amazing.

Gerard’s face was a palette of emotions as he muttered his disorganized thoughts, but now it shattered, for a moment, before softening completely. He put his hands on either side of Mikey’s face and he touched their foreheads together, so that all Mikey could really see was the brilliance of Gerard’s green eyes, with his breath blowing on his face and their lips touching as he spoke, almost like a kiss but not really, because that’s not what the gesture meant, and it was just so, so overwhelming (that word was popping up too often for his taste) that when Gerard whispered, “Ssh, Mikey, don’t cry,” he did.

Amazing.

I have sort of fallen out of the loop with reading fanfics, but I really liked yours. It was well written, and I couldn't find any big mistakes. And most of all it wasn't anything stupid like some fanfics. Also it's wasn't slash or waycest - yaay I'm happy. That's the main reason I stopped reading fanfics. You've proably brought me back to reading them. You give me hope that there are still people that will write good fanfics and not turn them into slash. xD

It's not Waycest, I assure you! -_- And it would'nt be, don't worry.

My heart filled with dread in the middle of Chapter 9. /Please/ don't let it be Waycest. It can't be. He loves Alicia.

Poor Mikey. I'm guessing this would lead to his 'bipolar-like condition'.

Amazing. (Again, yes.) I love how everything ties in so well with real life. With Reprise and The Black Parade and all. More soon - please!

Aw. It's cute.
Well done on creating an original plot.

Amazing. I love the emotion in this story. I can actually imagine this happening in real life.

This is just so amazingly well written. Its done in a way that makes you feel like a passer by - but with an instant real insight into their life. I can really relate to and feel what Mikey is feeling about Gerard. I also love the fact that its not turned into another waycest either. Because there are hundreds of those.

Did I go on a bit then? :oops: Sorry *hides*

this is so great.
your writing style is beautiful.
*subscribes

that was really good
it was sweet, deep and touching

I really liked it. You took something that could have easily turned out a cliché and made it into a chronic of some kind. I was glad to see you kept your narration to the point, without digressing a lot and that gave it an objective feeling, like you were just a passer-by, telling us the story of his life in those first two or three chapters. And then the fourth just gave that comical relief, you know? It lightened things up a bit and the moment between the two brothers in the last few lines was really touching.

All in all, I enjoyed reading this.

Aw...sweetness

yay brotherly love!!! continue!!! :D

i love this
we need a story about brother love not just ugly frerards and gay porn
i really really like it
i mean it
you should definetly continue