The Rarest Gem - Comments

@ vacant eyes.
Thank you so much for all the tips! I started another story also. If you want to check that out too <3 <3

I think the idea behind this story could be a really good one! A couple bits of advice would be to focus on capitalization of names and separation of paragraphs. I always love seeing ‘first stories’ because I remember when I started writing, and it ended up being the best thing that ever happened to me! Keep writing!